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 Posted: Thu Mar 01, 2007 7:18 pm
Lately I feel as if I'm in a daze.
Nothing seems quite real at the moment, and what I thought I once understood, I now know I know nothing about. Things just seem to get so much more complicated as we grow older. We begin to know ourselvs better, and at the same time we realize that the ends we once knew to tie up life dont anymore. Things seem scattered.
I feel dazed.
...But I'm not dead yet, I dont feel that much older yet either, and I'm NOT going to give up!
I still have time to figure out this place!
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Still though...I wish things weren't so blury.
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Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2007 3:55 pm
Interesting... I do with though you would capitalize all your 'I's and add the commas in your contractions. Just proper form and makes thing look more profession. You dont need to worry about them in commenting but ya. It felt confusing.. like the feeling of the narrator. Whether that was intended or not I liked it.
Also this may get more reads if you title it. They are what draw the reader's curious eyes.
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Posted: Wed Mar 07, 2007 6:15 pm
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