Let me go Let me die!

[Emo Girlgamer]

Let me go,let me die!

If you wont let me do that then let me cry,because i just wanna say goodbye

lets me dream of dead butterflies,because it seems that they have the purfect

lives.....

let me cry away all through the night because i wanna take a journey to death

without light.Let me cut myself without a person to blame these scars are

something that will always remain with this horrible pain!So let me go,let me

cry,let me fake a great life,let me convince everyone that i have a nice life with no

pain,so let me stay here left in the dark with pain and nothing else to gain but pain and shame......  

[Iggie360]

Hmmm I like it.  

[Emo Girlgamer]

thnxs  

[-Isel-]

It's not poetry. It's a personal, soliloqual lamentation, with no rhetorical devices, and no rhythm or meter.  

[Emo Girlgamer]

Isel

It's not poetry. It's a personal, soliloqual lamentation, with no rhetorical devices, and no rhythm or meter.

so i really suck at trying to write poetry thats all i really wanted to know  

[-Isel-]

Emo Girlgamer

Isel

It's not poetry. It's a personal, soliloqual lamentation, with no rhetorical devices, and no rhythm or meter.

so i really suck at trying to write poetry thats all i really wanted to know

Well, if that's the kind of poetry you write, then yes you do.  

[Emo Girlgamer]

ok makes me wonder why i won a poem contest wit this  

[DaisukeOrDark]

Because Isel has high standerds for others. I thought that it was good better then some of the stuff in this guild.  

[Hikaru Akumu]

Truth be told...

1.] It gets confusing with how it's broken up. Perhaps if you put them into stanzas it would be easier to understand and please attempt to write with correct spelling. Makes it even better.

2.] Eh..The flow of it is...kind of...odd. Got me somewhat confused, but it's okay for a beginner I suppose.

3.] Break it up, Make it neater, organize it

:] Otherwise...I suppose it's a decent poem.  

[Emo Girlgamer]

DaisukeOrDark

Because Isel has high standerds for others. I thought that it was good better then some of the stuff in this guild.

thnxs...  

[Emo Girlgamer]

Hikaru Akumu

Truth be told...

1.] It gets confusing with how it's broken up. Perhaps if you put them into stanzas it would be easier to understand and please attempt to write with correct spelling. Makes it even better.

2.] Eh..The flow of it is...kind of...odd. Got me somewhat confused, but it's okay for a beginner I suppose.

3.] Break it up, Make it neater, organize it

:] Otherwise...I suppose it's a decent poem.

k thnxs for the tips  

[Rellik San]

Just strikes me as more of the same, nothing new, unique or interesting to say in the slightest. -_-  

[A.Box.Of.Sharp.Objects]

Yeah, its ok but a little VERY confusing to read.  

[-Isel-]

Emo Girlgamer

ok makes me wonder why i won a poem contest wit this

Because the middle-school and high-school poetry world insists on making everyone feel like they're special.

It's a world of false hope when you submit something to a poem contest.  

[DaisukeOrDark]

Isel

Emo Girlgamer

ok makes me wonder why i won a poem contest wit this

Because the middle-school and high-school poetry world insists on making everyone feel like they're special.

It's a world of false hope when you submit something to a poem contest.

Like talent shows and job fairs.