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 Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:48 pm
I like it. I could probably use Urn for the pants, and Gift of the Goddess for the feet.
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:49 pm
Kags, that's damn good regardless. You wanna offer me some feedback on this?I'm never gonna get it ever but I'd like to see what you think could improve.
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:50 pm
Allegro Did you think about, like, Golden Laurels?
but i was using his inventory
and added small cheap things like the pocket watch and leggings
i wanted to make it practical
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:50 pm
TtheHero
Ah, what do you mean, Dan? Apologize?T, I know you love your writing, and that's the important part. But when I read it, what I see is potential for something better, more polished.
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:51 pm
Kagura_Sohma Allegro Did you think about, like, Golden Laurels?
but i was using his inventory
and added small cheap things like the pocket watch and leggings
i wanted to make it practicaladerp dan no think about things that makes sense
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:51 pm
Allegro Did you think about, like, Golden Laurels?
sweatdrop
Edit @Kagura: Did Tektek not show the Watch? I know I have one from a Goldfish drop. Weird.
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:54 pm
Allegro TtheHero
Ah, what do you mean, Dan? Apologize?T, I know you love your writing, and that's the important part. But when I read it, what I see is potential for something better, more polished.
Don;t worry, I'm trying.
Every single time I backtrack to a story, I clear up any errors whatsoever.
My schoolwork is impeding my progress to really focus on more editing, since I'm Still working on fleshing out episode 1 more.
I'm glad Fish said it was okay to revive the thread for my story whenever.
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:54 pm
Allegro Kags, that's damn good regardless. You wanna offer me some feedback on this?I'm never gonna get it ever but I'd like to see what you think could improve. You are joking right?
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:55 pm
Allegro Kags, that's damn good regardless. You wanna offer me some feedback on this?I'm never gonna get it ever but I'd like to see what you think could improve.
let me tweak it a little though
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:55 pm
TtheHero Allegro TtheHero
Ah, what do you mean, Dan? Apologize?T, I know you love your writing, and that's the important part. But when I read it, what I see is potential for something better, more polished.
Don;t worry, I'm trying.
Every single time I backtrack to a story, I clear up any errors whatsoever.
My schoolwork is impeding my progress to really focus on more editing, since I'm Still working on fleshing out episode 1 more.
I'm glad Fish said it was okay to revive the thread for my story whenever.You know what always helps me improve? I'm not saying abandon your story entirely. But start something new in the interim. A new set of character and a new setting allows you to improve your mechanics, which can then be transferred to your old story.
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:56 pm
Kagura_Sohma Allegro Kags, that's damn good regardless. You wanna offer me some feedback on this?I'm never gonna get it ever but I'd like to see what you think could improve.
let me tweak it a little thoughIt's a favorite of mine, I just haven't updated it in several months, so I don't know if there's any new s**t I could add.
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:57 pm
Night guys... my hed hurts like a ********>
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 10:57 pm
Regulust Night guys... my hed hurts like a ******** class="clear"> Good night Reg.
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 11:00 pm
And after lurking for several hours, I'll just say night and vanish, like I was never here-
o wait i wasnt
;D
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Posted: Sun May 10, 2009 11:01 pm
Ginn Rummy And after lurking for several hours, I'll just say night and vanish, like I was never here- o wait i wasnt ;D
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