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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:07 am
YOU. I WANT YOU TO LOOK IN THE GALLERY.
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:15 am
Lol, Japanese metal bands are so bad in making up perverted lyrics. sweatdrop
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:15 am
Awesome Tree YOU. I WANT YOU TO LOOK IN THE GALLERY. Beat you to it b***h! 3nodding XD
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:16 am
Vaettur Lol, Japanese metal bands are so bad in making up perverted lyrics. sweatdrop Yet the Japanese are so good at appealing to perversion... What a twisted world we live in.
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:16 am
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:18 am
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:20 am
J of The Wind Vaettur Lol, Japanese metal bands are so bad in making up perverted lyrics. sweatdrop Yet the Japanese are so good at appealing to perversion... What a twisted world we live in. Yeah but i mean, it's just ridiculous. xd Check this: Barbatos - d**k is ******** Big "d**k is ******** big
p***y is ******** tight
a**l ******** is waiting
Big d**k's might
d**k is ******** ******** off shaving p***y
Put it in b***h mouth
It will makes you to ill
Sexual metal holocaust will
Crush poser gay!
d**k is ******** ******** off shaving p***y
I will please entry a**s
Oh my god! Give me spicy p***y
p***y is good smell
s**t is bad smell
d**k is ******** ******** off shaving p***y"JUST SO YOU KNOW! scream
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:20 am
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:20 am
I saw that, Mistah Ryan! You, my good sir, are cute.
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:29 am
Vaettur J of The Wind Vaettur Lol, Japanese metal bands are so bad in making up perverted lyrics. sweatdrop Yet the Japanese are so good at appealing to perversion... What a twisted world we live in. Yeah but i mean, it's just ridiculous. xd Check this: Barbatos - d**k is ******** Big "d**k is ******** big
p***y is ******** tight
a**l ******** is waiting
Big d**k's might
d**k is ******** ******** off shaving p***y
Put it in b***h mouth
It will makes you to ill
Sexual metal holocaust will
Crush poser gay!
d**k is ******** ******** off shaving p***y
I will please entry a**s
Oh my god! Give me spicy p***y
p***y is good smell
s**t is bad smell
d**k is ******** ******** off shaving p***y"JUST SO YOU KNOW! scream .______. Why the ******** did I inquire? gonk @ Orph- even bigger H'AAAW!
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:48 am
JJJJJJJJ
Is this well written to you?
http://s-dude.deviantart.com/art/What-Do-I-Do-140026077
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:57 am
J of The Wind .______. Why the ******** did I inquire? gonk Music-wise, the song's actually pretty cool. xd
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:59 am
Awesome Tree JJJJJJJJ Is this well written to you? http://s-dude.deviantart.com/art/What-Do-I-Do-140026077 Its seems structurally sound for the most part! However a couple of standouts to me: In this sentence: Quote: It felt like small fireworks were lit inside my stomach, for I had a sudden wave of ecstatic feelings wash over me, much like fireworks. Repetiotion is nice, but not really necessary. (personal opinion) And as for the ending, it was left a bit ambiguous. Like the twist could go either way. Was the question read as " Do you see yourself with anyone else in the future?" or " Do you see yourself with anyone else, other than the one your with, in the future?" Otherwise I find it to be well written. 3nodding
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 6:02 am
J of The Wind Awesome Tree JJJJJJJJ Is this well written to you? http://s-dude.deviantart.com/art/What-Do-I-Do-140026077 Its seems structurally sound for the most part! However a couple of standouts to me: In this sentence: Quote: It felt like small fireworks were lit inside my stomach, for I had a sudden wave of ecstatic feelings wash over me, much like fireworks. Repetiotion is nice, but not really necessary. (personal opinion) And as for the ending, it was left a bit ambiguous. Like the twist could go either way. Was the question read as " Do you see yourself with anyone else in the future?" or " Do you see yourself with anyone else, other than the one your with, in the future?" Otherwise I find it to be well written. 3nodding But the subject wasn't with anyone. Was that a bit confusing? Edit surprised god, that was a big typo of the extra else.
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