December 23, 2007

[Galladonsfire]

Oukow

I'm glad that the cluttered desk didn't seem idiotic... <.>; But some things do annoy others so very much, no matter how small a problem it may be....

Thank you, Galladonsfire {you're new aren't you? Or am I mistaken?.}. Insanity and sanity seems so confusing to me... The fact that you can lose control of yourself and end up doing who knows what, scares me so much, but what scares me even more is the fact that it seems so strange afterwords and can leave an after shock and also can make you wonder if you just did, what you did... Do you know what I mean? ><;

Thank you guys for the comments. <3

Yes, I am new here, and it is sometimes confusing to one who has never seen it or witnessed it. Or even experianced it. A friend of mine told me once that sanity has a line and it is only as thin as we make it. So we can make it or break it. wink  

[Oukow]

That's a cool saying. >w<
And welcome.! =3  

[Spastic waffles]

I liked this, and I think that the reader not entirely understanding what's going on actually adds to the story. It helps give a sense of how confused the girl is.

This story was really effective at portraying emotions. One of the most effective portryals I've seen in a while, actually. Good job!!!  

[Voxxx]

I liked the theme in this one. A few minor mistakes, all grammatical.

I took deep breaths, joking on them almost.
Choking?

And somewhere, you wrote "coming down from the stares" as opposed to stairs. I didn't notice anything else, I'll check again later (aka, not early in the morning sweatdrop )

Apart from my English-nazi-ness, I really liked the perspective.
It was emotional, it raged. It was very visual, very vivid. I understand what it's like to have a crappy relationship with your mom, so it kind of hit a personal note. Hope to see more of your work soon.  

[Oukow]

Thank you guys. I hope to write some more too, it's one of my new year goals. 3nodding

I went back and changed 'joking' and 'stares', thank you Voxxx for pointing the words out. I hope that your relationship with your mom gets better.