poem ko

[UndeadRomance]

jromisdead

Death Pill

As this final pill I swallowed I can feel the cold wind blows through my skin flowing like the river pushing me to lie on my bed as this pill enters my system I could feel my consiousness leaving me, my body hardens like a rock and my mind slowly dies… as this final pill is consumed my dying wordsis “forget me not my love for I will wait for you in the afterlife” as this pill is digested I will now finally lie in my death bed. And waking up journeying into the afterlife finding a spot to which I will wait until death grips you and send you here. Find me for I am waiting for only you my only beloved waiting in this serene wilderness with nothing to bring chaos upon us. I will wait for you here as long as it takes

this poem is like a story from demolition lovers and yeah Honey,this mirror isn't big enough for the two of us... it definitely rocks! ^^  

[LivingDeadRomance]

po pala kuya gerard hindi nga lang po pala dun mga po scene pong ganun po marami pa po sweatdrop sweatdrop sweatdrop sweatdrop sweatdrop sweatdrop  

[chezeex3]

jromisdead

Death Pill

As this final pill I swallowed
I can feel the cold wind blowing through my skin
flowing like the river
pushing me to lie on my bed
as this pill enters my system
I could feel my consiousness leaving me,
my body hardens like a rock
and my mind slowly dies…
as this final pill is consumed
my dying words are
“forget me not,my love,
for I will wait for you in the afterlife”
as this pill is digested
I will now finally lie in my death bed.
And waking up journeying into the afterlife
finding a spot to which I will wait until death grips you and send you here.
Find me for I am waiting for only you, my only beloved
waiting in this serene wilderness with no nothing to bring chaos upon us.
I will wait for you here as long as even if it takes forever.

Impressive. smile
But what you did is not a poem. It's more of like an essay.
And it would have been better if you used "As this pill..." once.
Also, in my quote, I edited some parts and pointed out some of your mistakes which is bolded. I hope you won't mind.  

[babyface_assassins]

wow may english teacher pla tyo dto... si ate chelsi xd xd xd

 

[chezeex3]

babyface_assassins

wow may english teacher pla tyo dto... si ate chelsi xd xd xd

xd
English ko ay fail kaya. =3  

[babyface_assassins]

eh bkit nman po?

 

[pink-alchemy]

FOREVER

You’re a stranger at once,

But now you’re a part,

And for me it won’t last,

‘Coz you mean a lot.



Completing the piece of me,

makes me know the real me.

And you’re a piece,

Whom have been part of me.



Even time can’t last it,

‘Coz its forever,

And there’s no reason to end,

For we know it and feel it.



You’re a treasure,

who have no key

just to open it’s lock,

as a sign of end.



I’ll l bury it in my heart,

And rememberin’ those smiles and weeps

you’ve been shared,

‘Till forever.  

[LivingDeadRomance]

ang galing niyo po ate danica ^^  

[babyface_assassins]

best yan ba ung sinali mo sa arena dti? o iba pa yan... new creation mo ba yan?

 

[pink-alchemy]

baliw eto un!
wkaoKO!
di ko na alam kung anung nangyari dun e..
wakoKO!

meron akong isa dito,,
kaso ayaw kong
i-post!
bka sbhn nla..naki2pagaway ako e!
wkaokO!  

[babyface_assassins]

ano b yan bitter or war freak na poetry?

 

[pink-alchemy]

babyface_assassins

ano b yan bitter or war freak na poetry?

?? best di ko magets! wakOKO!  

[babyface_assassins]

nvm mo na lang ung sinabi ko sweatdrop

knino mo ba yan dedicated kasi parang may inspiration ka jan eh

 

[Helper435]

ang lalim ng poem na yun ah..nice!  

[pink-alchemy]

babyface_assassins

nvm mo na lang ung sinabi ko sweatdrop

knino mo ba yan dedicated kasi parang may inspiration ka jan eh

secret...XD