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Posted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 12:29 pm
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Posted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 12:31 pm
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addseale2 Last line is ouch. Nice. Wouldst thou trade away A world of endless day And delve into the deepest night to soar above the skies? The blight? The endless white seas of marred bliss? Rapture unending? Perfect silence? The night is very cold.
Why Ouch?
I like your poem as well. It is very interesting and abstract in a good way.
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Posted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 4:08 pm
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Glowing
the light flowed through his every cell it's bright as day, it's loud as a yell yet no one sees its gossamer strands reaching out like grasping hands
they find an ear, they slip right in searching for a good way in inside, they look not for chatter not for an idiot's constant patter
they look for an underfed bulb of doubt festering, not ready to sprout they clean it up, they give it food take it out of its dark seclude
Suddenly, I begin to doubt What my life's been all about I worship nothing true or real My painted fantasies start to peel
And it is then I truly see The pure light splaying off of me. It spreads to others, carries the word; My true message shall be heard.
The light I wrangle, that I control, Is nothing less than all my soul. To the stupid and uncouth, It will ferry all the truth.
and i'm glowing
'Twas a spur of the moment thing; constructive criticism is much appreciated. My inspiration was the way Neo saw the world after he'd been blinded (in Revolutions).
addseale2, I liked this poem. It captures a lot, yet is very short, and the frequent question marks emphasize the fact that only the last line is a statement.
Dathu, I love the contrast between the two worlds--I hope one day we can see the sun rising like that.
Sanguvixen, I'm pretty sure that addseale2 is referring to the last line of your "My Fantasy and Your Fantasy": "Go fix yourself theistic worm." That line is quite an ouch.
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Posted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 5:02 pm
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DivideByZero14 Glowing
the light flowed through his every cell it's bright as day, it's loud as a yell yet no one sees its gossamer strands reaching out like grasping hands
they find an ear, they slip right in searching for a good way in inside, they look not for chatter not for an idiot's constant patter
they look for an underfed bulb of doubt festering, not ready to sprout they clean it up, they give it food take it out of its dark seclude
Suddenly, I begin to doubt What my life's been all about I worship nothing true or real My painted fantasies start to peel
And it is then I truly see The pure light splaying off of me. It spreads to others, carries the word; My true message shall be heard.
The light I wrangle, that I control, Is nothing less than all my soul. To the stupid and uncouth, It will ferry all the truth.
and i'm glowing'Twas a spur of the moment thing; constructive criticism is much appreciated. My inspiration was the way Neo saw the world after he'd been blinded (in Revolutions). addseale2, I liked this poem. It captures a lot, yet is very short, and the frequent question marks emphasize the fact that only the last line is a statement. Dathu, I love the contrast between the two worlds--I hope one day we can see the sun rising like that. Sanguvixen, I'm pretty sure that addseale2 is referring to the last line of your "My Fantasy and Your Fantasy": "Go fix yourself theistic worm." That line is quite an ouch.
Beautiful poem! heart heart heart
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Posted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 5:07 pm
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Posted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 6:43 pm
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Posted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 7:29 pm
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Posted: Sat May 06, 2006 10:14 pm
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Posted: Sat May 06, 2006 10:15 pm
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Posted: Sun May 07, 2006 2:28 am
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Posted: Sun May 07, 2006 12:09 pm
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Posted: Sun May 07, 2006 1:57 pm
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Posted: Sun May 07, 2006 2:14 pm
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Muaethia DivideByZero14 Muaethia DivideByZero14, I love 'Glowing'- it really has meaning, because it's based on physical things- love the description of 'gossamer' blaugh EDIT: I forgot, emoticon posts are spam. Now this edit makes it not-spam! Meh, put it this way
If emoticon posts are spam
And spam goes to hell
OMGZ IM GOING TO HELL
*looks over shoulder to see guild mods not looking impressed* So, yeah, ummmm... yes, I agree. That edit makes it not spam! ^_^
Oh crap. I think this post is off topic and spam, also.
I need sleep 3
Sorry to disappoint, but edits don't really help unless they actually add content. Divide's edit just pretty much acknowledged it was spam. Things like that aren't so bad though. It's when people reply to discussions with emoticons. o.x
@Dathu- xD Can I just say everyone's awesome?
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