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 Posted: Sat Dec 09, 2006 7:48 pm
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Posted: Wed Dec 13, 2006 10:15 pm
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hellraiser13-911 darkness creeping in creeping in so slowly darkness creeping in it only comes wen im lonly it never comes here wen n e ones around darkness creeping in its taking me down away from the light preventing a fight chasing me corrupting me surrounding me with evil so thats just the begining.....if u want to add something to it....then reccomend a line or something....cuz i need some opinion of wat to put next........did u like it?......tell me the truth cuz i need to kno smile
It sounds pretty good so far but it does need some work. I think it would be a good idea to pay more attention to grammar and spelling when/if you post the complete thing. While typing 'n e' instead of 'any 'might save you a second or two, it can also cause people to look down on your work because it can make it look sloppy and hard to read.
Other than that, good luck finishing it! I'm sure it will come out great! |
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