Kissing Angels and Burning Wings

[[ In Nomine Satanas ]]

Ok well I'm working on a part two. Dunno where to go with it, but I've decided I want to do a part two.  

[KirbyVictorious]

anyone ever notice that a lot of people get murdered on the front page, but no one ever gets caught? And if they do, the policeman is a murderous revenge-driven fiend/morally depraved?

C'mon, guys. Really.  

[BrooklynBrooklyn]

Drugs are really hard to write, and you did very well.
I would know. I've been heavily researching illicit drugs since I was thirteen.
The one line about the freezie though, it disconects the reader from the story and makes it sound more like a documentary on cocaine methodoglogy.
Try incorperating it into the story more.
Otherwise, this was wonderful I love your characterization and the integration of the song. Very well written.

 

[[ In Nomine Satanas ]]

Thanks for that comment. I will certainly try to work it in better.

Part two coming soon. Like tonight. The long awaited return of Satanas beckons.  

[The Splendiferous Rufu]

I agree with Suicide, on the point of the 'freezie' line making it sound like a documentary, and there was one other line, about the Djarum Blacks that seemed out-of-place... how they were made with cloves, so the nicotine lasted longer?
But uh. I think that informational, ironic type of writing could work very, veerry well in this piece, but you'd need it to be more consistent.

Other than that, I liked it a lot. :3 The character's casual view of the girlfriend's (?) death is haunting, and your prosey description, of the drugs especially - i.e. 'snowcapped mountains' - are gorgeous. Great job. heart

<3RUFU

 

[[ In Nomine Satanas ]]

Thanks. I wrote this directly into the browser, no forethought or editing. When I'm ready to publish, I'll fix those two lines smile sweatdrop