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Posted: Tue Aug 04, 2015 10:09 am
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Your Rank: Jounin Ninja Class: Ninjutsu Name of Jutsu: Jōki no Katachi (Form of Steam) Rank of Jutsu: S Jutsu's Element: Steam Jutsu Type:Ninjutsu, Jinchuuriki jutsu (Fourth and Final one) Do you want you Jutsu added to the Guild List: Nah Description: This jutsu capitalizes on the taijutsu-like aspects of the Five-Tailed Beast while melding its element, Steam, with it. It is the ultimate defensive technique of the Gobi Jinchuuriki. Upon activation, the user explodes into steam, which quickly expands to cover the entire battlefield. The only way to clear the battlefield of the steam is with a Futon technique equal to one rank below this jutsu's rank or above. Because this jutsu blurs the line between taijutsu and ninjutsu, similar to a taijutsu style, ten chakra is drained from the user every post the jutsu is active.
The moment the user activates this technique and covers the battlefield with steam, they gain a +2 speed bonus. The speed bonus conforms to the rule of the soft cap, and the ONLY way the user can gain any more of a speed bonus beyond their base speed once this jutsu is activated is by the bonus granted while being in at least Stage One of the Bijuu itself.
The secondary effect of this jutsu is that the user effectively becomes one with the steam. When injured, steam can fill in their wounds. Any part of their body can become steam and instantly reform. The entire battlefield is their domain. Because of the versatility between the steam and the user, the steam itself is unique to other steam, and loses its scalding property. The steam will do damage to the victim, and will only put them at a disadvantage in the fact that their sight is obscured. Doujutsu have a hard time looking through the chakra field due to the fact that the entire battlefield shares chakra with Kukishi, and thus all looks like an indistinguishable blur.
So, review: Ten chakra is drained every post the jutsu is active User gains +2 speed bonus User's body can become steam and move about extremely quickly Doujutsu can't see through the steam The steam itself doesn't do any harm to anyone like normal steam does
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Posted: Tue Aug 04, 2015 2:41 pm
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Akshae Shanka Boost it to 20 chakra a post due to the utility and change it so that Doujutsu user's have incredibly cloudy vision within the steam, or if it's Byakugan they are mostly blind due to the density of the steam. Since things like the Rinnegan and Sharingan increase perception of the eyes alongside it and just show small portions of chakra compared to the complete chakra sensing of the Byakugan. I added one more utility, and made the other changes you suggested. Hopefully the other utility won't require more chakra cost haha. As a side note, the user can pretty much already use the last utility by facing part of their body somewhere to activate the jutsu, however I figured I'd add it in there just for the sake of clarity later on.
Your Rank: Jounin Ninja Class: Ninjutsu Name of Jutsu: Jōki no Katachi (Form of Steam) Rank of Jutsu: S Jutsu's Element: Steam Jutsu Type:Ninjutsu, Jinchuuriki jutsu (Fourth and Final one) Do you want you Jutsu added to the Guild List: Nah Description: This jutsu capitalizes on the taijutsu-like aspects of the Five-Tailed Beast while melding its element, Steam, with it. It is the ultimate defensive technique of the Gobi Jinchuuriki. Upon activation, the user explodes into steam, which quickly expands to cover the entire battlefield. The only way to clear the battlefield of the steam is with a Futon technique equal to one rank below this jutsu's rank or above. Because this jutsu blurs the line between taijutsu and ninjutsu, similar to a taijutsu style, ten chakra is drained from the user every post the jutsu is active.
The moment the user activates this technique and covers the battlefield with steam, they gain a +2 speed bonus. The speed bonus conforms to the rule of the soft cap, and the ONLY way the user can gain any more of a speed bonus beyond their base speed once this jutsu is activated is by the bonus granted while being in at least Stage One of the Bijuu itself.
The secondary effect of this jutsu is that the user effectively becomes one with the steam. When injured, steam can fill in their wounds. Any part of their body can become steam and instantly reform. The entire battlefield is their domain. Because of the versatility between the steam and the user, the steam itself is unique to other steam, and loses its scalding property. The steam will do damage to the victim, and will only put them at a disadvantage in the fact that their sight is obscured. Doujutsu have a hard time looking through the chakra field due to the fact that the entire battlefield shares chakra with Kukishi, and thus all looks like an indistinguishable blur.
So, review: Twenty chakra is drained every post the jutsu is active User gains +2 speed bonus User's body can become steam and move about extremely quickly Doujutsu is actually hampered by the steam, due to the chakra density. The Byakugan is nearly altogether blind, whereas with other chakra-sensing doujutsu, they only have blurrier vision. The steam itself doesn't do any harm to anyone like normal steam does The user can cast Steam or Bijuu techniques remotely from anywhere within the battlefield, but only if they are in some stage of the demon form, and other restrictions relating to the jutsu still apply.
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Posted: Tue Aug 04, 2015 3:15 pm
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Akshae Shanka The only restriction I'll put on the last bit is that it gives some sort of indication, so it's not instant GG wtf stealth attacks. So maybe the steam swirls a bit or something similar to that. Added in that bit. Look good? Your Rank: Jounin Ninja Class: Ninjutsu Name of Jutsu: Jōki no Katachi (Form of Steam) Rank of Jutsu: S Jutsu's Element: Steam Jutsu Type:Ninjutsu, Jinchuuriki jutsu (Fourth and Final one) Do you want you Jutsu added to the Guild List: Nah Description: This jutsu capitalizes on the taijutsu-like aspects of the Five-Tailed Beast while melding its element, Steam, with it. It is the ultimate defensive technique of the Gobi Jinchuuriki. Upon activation, the user explodes into steam, which quickly expands to cover the entire battlefield. The only way to clear the battlefield of the steam is with a Futon technique equal to one rank below this jutsu's rank or above. Because this jutsu blurs the line between taijutsu and ninjutsu, similar to a taijutsu style, ten chakra is drained from the user every post the jutsu is active.
The moment the user activates this technique and covers the battlefield with steam, they gain a +2 speed bonus. The speed bonus conforms to the rule of the soft cap, and the ONLY way the user can gain any more of a speed bonus beyond their base speed once this jutsu is activated is by the bonus granted while being in at least Stage One of the Bijuu itself.
The secondary effect of this jutsu is that the user effectively becomes one with the steam. When injured, steam can fill in their wounds. Any part of their body can become steam and instantly reform. The entire battlefield is their domain. Because of the versatility between the steam and the user, the steam itself is unique to other steam, and loses its scalding property. The steam will do damage to the victim, and will only put them at a disadvantage in the fact that their sight is obscured. Doujutsu have a hard time looking through the chakra field due to the fact that the entire battlefield shares chakra with Kukishi, and thus all looks like an indistinguishable blur.
So, review: Twenty chakra is drained every post the jutsu is active User gains +2 speed bonus User's body can become steam and move about extremely quickly Doujutsu is actually hampered by the steam, due to the chakra density. The Byakugan is nearly altogether blind, whereas with other chakra-sensing doujutsu, they only have blurrier vision. The steam itself doesn't do any harm to anyone like normal steam does The user can cast Steam or Bijuu techniques remotely from anywhere within the battlefield, but only if they are in some stage of the demon form, and other restrictions relating to the jutsu still apply. Before a technique is used in this way, the steam that it will be used from shimmers and swirls around briefly.
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Posted: Tue Aug 04, 2015 3:32 pm
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Posted: Tue Aug 04, 2015 3:45 pm
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Posted: Tue Aug 04, 2015 4:27 pm
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Posted: Wed Aug 05, 2015 5:26 pm
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Posted: Wed Aug 05, 2015 5:49 pm
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Posted: Fri Aug 07, 2015 8:40 pm
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Posted: Fri Aug 07, 2015 10:43 pm
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Chaos_wolf12 Name:Akuma Oda Your Rank: Jounin Ninja Class: Ninjutsu Name of Jutsu: Trail of wisp Rank of Jutsu: A Jutsu's Element: Jutsu Type:Ninjutsu, Do you want you Jutsu added to the Guild List: Nah Description: The user can materialize himself into a small horde of black butterflies created by the darkness element in the bloodline given to the user, which is why it cannot be taught. Name:Akuma Oda Your Rank: Jounin Ninja Class: Ninjutsu Name of Jutsu: Dark Oni Rank of Jutsu: SS Jutsu's Element: Jutsu Type:Ninjutsu, Do you want you Jutsu added to the Guild List: Nah Description: The user creates a large humanoid figure the same size as a sussanoo, or wood avatar, as well as being on par with those examples. This technique does not use weapons, leaving it only able to use it's fist, with that downside there is an upside, this technique drains 5 chakra with each hit successfully landed on the opponent
Trail of Wisp: How long does the transformation last, besides the obvious power of flight, what else does it grant. Are you still vulnerable in this state? Are you the same speed? Can you spread apart as the butterflies?
Dark Oni: This is like the second Sussanoo clone you've made. I personally think that mimicking core points of other bloodlines is really lame, because it sorta just makes a chunk of that bloodline pointless. But I guess it's fine. Nevertheless, how long does it last? How fast is it? If it's as powerful as a Sussanoo, why does it matter that you lose 5 cp every hit you land? 5 cp is nothing, and it won't take more than two landed hits to kill someone. What are the properties of this Sussanoo clone? It takes an S rank jutsu and dies? Are you stuck inside of it like Sussanoo? Be specific.
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Posted: Fri Aug 07, 2015 10:50 pm
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Chaos_wolf12 Name:Akuma Oda Your Rank: Jounin Ninja Class: Ninjutsu Name of Jutsu: Trail of wisp Rank of Jutsu: A Jutsu's Element: Jutsu Type:Ninjutsu, Do you want you Jutsu added to the Guild List: Nah Description: The user can materialize himself into a small horde of black butterflies created by the darkness element in the bloodline given to the user, which is why it cannot be taught. Name:Akuma Oda Your Rank: Jounin Ninja Class: Ninjutsu Name of Jutsu: Dark Oni Rank of Jutsu: SS Jutsu's Element: Jutsu Type:Ninjutsu, Do you want you Jutsu added to the Guild List: Nah Description: The user creates a large humanoid figure the same size as a sussanoo, or wood avatar, as well as being on par with those examples. This technique does not use weapons, leaving it only able to use it's fist, with that downside there is an upside, this technique drains 5 chakra with each hit successfully landed on the opponent
Not to steal Gavin's thunder, but I feel there are some other additions to be made.
Trail of Wisp: Didn't Yami already do this same exact thing. I am pretty sure that this is how he entered the Otokage Office. He doesn't have darkness and already did it. So did you already make it a custom or were you just making up his ability to move like that?
Dark Oni: Susano'o clone. Its Gavin's choice since he was the first mod to look at it, but in my opinion should be denied. If you want to know why, see rule #14 of this post. Be original.
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