Los Gangstas. [LG]

[Chang524]

( mrgreen Damn right!)  

[Femmunition]

[Two wurds. Republicans is ill. cool ]  

[kaiser321]

that's 7 words. and an emoticon.

let's see, a rapping George Bush, and presidential Candidates having a dance-off http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wzyT9-9lUyE&feature=channel_page  

[NJ6]

*sigh* I am way to white to do this, but here goes my epic phail.

*epic street beat*

They call me the white boy but the name's not in vain,
Cause when I'm done with this rhyme, b***h, you'll be twitchin' in pain.
I'm representin, complimentin' with the U-G-M-F
I got my 9 and my 90 bustin' caps full o' death.

I'm poppin' in and poppin' out under the cover of night,
Rifle scope and extra mags and I'll be ready to fight.
b***h, you wanna push the Phantoms with yo' bitchin' so crass,
I load a mag, pull the trigger, let the caps bust yo' a**!

*Winded* How was that? ninja  

[Femmunition]

That was pretty good for a white boy. xD

From this post, I'd say that in a battle, you'd lose because you don't insult your opponent enough to damage them, but I can't really judge since it's only 1 post, maybe next time you'll hit people with more insults. However, in flow, you'd probably excel. I'd say work on your creativity a bit more.. experiment with metaphors, word play and etc.. Since you're a roleplayer, you're probably already good at this.  

[NJ6]

Femmunition

That was pretty good for a white boy. xD

From this post, I'd say that in a battle, you'd lose because you don't insult your opponent enough to damage them, but I can't really judge since it's only 1 post, maybe next time you'll hit people with more insults. However, in flow, you'd probably excel. I'd say work on your creativity a bit more.. experiment with metaphors, word play and etc.. Since you're a roleplayer, you're probably already good at this.

But... but... I iz a nise pursun...

When I write poetry, I tend to use more figurative language, but in general I'm usually blunt as hell. Let me think of another one that might work.

EDIT: Okay, here goes.

Check it, check it.

Chillin' in the hood with my homies and bros,
But when I see you walk up, b***h, you been stankin' like hoes.
You can't rap, you can't spell, you can't even complain,
'Cause when I bust out my nine, b***h, it is you I will flame.

In my hood they call me sir 'cause I'm the big bad dog.
I rock a 90 wit a 'nade, crossin' thick black fog.
I bust in yo hood, b***h, wit my 90 aflame,
But dem shells, they do nothin' 'cause yo face is a shame.

The smoke clears, the crowd clears and the place is a mess,
Then I grab you by your collar and I beat you to 'fess.
Interrogatin', Collaboratin' wit da junkies in back,
But you won't fess up, b***h, 'cause you're too high on crack.

I'm cuffin' you up 'cause I'm the man with the plan,
I throw you into my car because your too weak to stand.
I haul your fat a** down to County '05,
And so I lock yo a** up because yo mama don't drive.

Peace.  

[Femmunition]

Concerning keystyle battleling, NJ, improve on creativity on insults. The crack, hoes, and guns line is overused enough to lessen the impact of the insult in keystyle battle. Try talking trash about your oppenents more and try talking less about yourself. Simply insult the opponent, instead of saying what you're going to do to them. Have more variety in insults to spread the effect, like new insults every bar, though, make sure the insults are hard hitting in every line. Liked the beat you to fess' line. xD

Our roleplay subforum is going to be open soon, you'll be able to create roleplay gangs/mafias/law enforcement/militaries/rebellions/business/locations etc.. it'll be a free-for-all-attack-anyone (in a reasonable, fair, logical and realistic fashion) and free-reign RP provided it coincides with the map and other organizations. Only humans will be allowed as characters. =3