Poetry Thread: Athiest/Agnostic themed poetry welcome!

[Sanguvixen]

Dathu

"Lost and Found."

How that I came here

as yet is unknown.

A path hard beaten

from winds that have blown.

Did I come here to see

the trick to the show?

I felt just like lightning

with a straightening blow.

Surrounded by riddles

with the answer in sight.

It shines like a needle

in a hay stack of night.

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oooh! Dathu...I like it! It sounds pretty!

 

[FalseDiagnosis]

I liked the poem.
I enjoyed the imagery you used.
I liked the way you compared us nonbelievers to roses. biggrin
Keep up the good work...!  

[Sanguvixen]

It is Memorial Day...the day I post this...so in honor of it I sent a Poem to all of the people on my friendlist...and posted it in my main thread.

I figure I should post it here as well:

A Moment In Time

Somewhere, someplace a heart is aching
Longing for those whose lives have gone
Somewhere, someplace a heart is breaking
A loved one will not come home
A loved one will come back
Colors have bled into white and black
Today some of us roam freely
The price of that freedom is war
Freedom, what many are willing to die for
So this day, Memorial Day
Stop, think, and give thanks
To those who died so we may live
Stop, think, and give thanks
To those unselfish ones who put themselves in harm way
So that we may live another day
Freedom is so sublime
Give them a place in your heart
May this small unworthy rhyme
Bring those fighting for us all
A moment in time.

This is written by Sanguvixen/Lutra Silverwing/TRP. If you want to print this out, or show it to other people that is fine with me...HOWEVER, you must include something that shows other people who made this poem so that they know who wrote it.  

[Dathu]

Sanguvixen

It is Memorial Day...the day I post this...so in honor of it I sent a Poem to all of the people on my friendlist...and posted it in my main thread.

I figure I should post it here as well:

A Moment In Time

Somewhere, someplace a heart is aching
Longing for those whose lives have gone
Somewhere, someplace a heart is breaking
A loved one will not come home
A loved one will come back
Colors have bled into white and black
Today some of us roam freely
The price of that freedom is war
Freedom, what many are willing to die for
So this day, Memorial Day
Stop, think, and give thanks
To those who died so we may live
Stop, think, and give thanks
To those unselfish ones who put themselves in harm way
So that we may live another day
Freedom is so sublime
Give them a place in your heart
May this small unworthy rhyme
Bring those fighting for us all
A moment in time.

This is written by Sanguvixen/Lutra Silverwing/TRP. If you want to print this out, or show it to other people that is fine with me...HOWEVER, you must include something that shows other people who made this poem so that they know who wrote it.

You know, the way that poem flows, have you considered making it a villanelle?  

[GEt CrUnK iTs BiLlY!]

I haven't finished this poem and I hope it is ok because it was the first one that I wrote on my own without being forced to do it. I don't have a name for it yet but I will eventually! 3nodding

What is the worth of a hope that goes to waste?
What is the worth of food you can not taste?
And what is the worth of a god that is a fake?

What is the use of a kiss you can not feel?
What is the point of dealing with the devil?
Especially if the devil isn't real

And more to come! xd

 

[Sanguvixen]

Dathu

Sanguvixen

It is Memorial Day...the day I post this...so in honor of it I sent a Poem to all of the people on my friendlist...and posted it in my main thread.

I figure I should post it here as well:

A Moment In Time

Somewhere, someplace a heart is aching
Longing for those whose lives have gone
Somewhere, someplace a heart is breaking
A loved one will not come home
A loved one will come back
Colors have bled into white and black
Today some of us roam freely
The price of that freedom is war
Freedom, what many are willing to die for
So this day, Memorial Day
Stop, think, and give thanks
To those who died so we may live
Stop, think, and give thanks
To those unselfish ones who put themselves in harm way
So that we may live another day
Freedom is so sublime
Give them a place in your heart
May this small unworthy rhyme
Bring those fighting for us all
A moment in time.

This is written by Sanguvixen/Lutra Silverwing/TRP. If you want to print this out, or show it to other people that is fine with me...HOWEVER, you must include something that shows other people who made this poem so that they know who wrote it.

You know, the way that poem flows, have you considered making it a villanelle?

Uh...mind explaining to me what a villanelle is? I've never heard of the term before. sweatdrop

 

[Sanguvixen]

Thatisonesexypanda!

I haven't finished this poem and I hope it is ok because it was the first one that I wrote on my own without being forced to do it. I don't have a name for it yet but I will eventually! 3nodding

What is the worth of a hope that goes to waste?
What is the worth of food you can not taste?
And what is the worth of a god that is a fake?

What is the use of a kiss you can not feel?
What is the point of dealing with the devil?
Especially if the devil isn't real

And more to come! xd

It sounds good so far. 3nodding

 

[Dathu]

Sanguvixen

Dathu

Sanguvixen

It is Memorial Day...the day I post this...so in honor of it I sent a Poem to all of the people on my friendlist...and posted it in my main thread.

I figure I should post it here as well:

A Moment In Time

Somewhere, someplace a heart is aching
Longing for those whose lives have gone
Somewhere, someplace a heart is breaking
A loved one will not come home
A loved one will come back
Colors have bled into white and black
Today some of us roam freely
The price of that freedom is war
Freedom, what many are willing to die for
So this day, Memorial Day
Stop, think, and give thanks
To those who died so we may live
Stop, think, and give thanks
To those unselfish ones who put themselves in harm way
So that we may live another day
Freedom is so sublime
Give them a place in your heart
May this small unworthy rhyme
Bring those fighting for us all
A moment in time.

This is written by Sanguvixen/Lutra Silverwing/TRP. If you want to print this out, or show it to other people that is fine with me...HOWEVER, you must include something that shows other people who made this poem so that they know who wrote it.

You know, the way that poem flows, have you considered making it a villanelle?

Uh...mind explaining to me what a villanelle is? I've never heard of the term before. sweatdrop

It's a style of poetry that works like this:

1) It is a poem of nineteen lines.
2) It has five stanzas, each of three lines, with a final one of four lines.
3) The first line of the first stanza is repeated as the last line of the second and fourth stanzas.
4) The third line of the first stanza is repeated is repeated as the last line of the third and fifth stanzas.
5) These two refrain lines follow each other to become the second-to-last and the last lines of the poem.
6) The rhyme scheme is aba. The rhymes are repeated according to the refrains.

I know that sounds complicated as f**, so here's an example. It's my favorite. I actually don't like poetry, but every now and then...

Wendy Cope

Reading Scheme

Here is Peter. Here is Jane. They like fun.
Jane has a big doll. Peter has a ball.
Look, Jane, look! Look at the dog! See him run!

Here is Mummy. She has baked a bun.
Here is the milkman. He has come to call.
Here is Peter. Here is Jane. They like fun.

Go Peter! Go Jane! Come, milkman, come!
The milkman likes Mummy. She likes them all.
Look, Jane, look! Look at the dog! See him run!


Here are the curtains. They shut out the sun.
Let us peep! On tiptoe Jane! You are small!
Here is Peter. Here is Jane. They like fun.

I hear a car, Jane. The milkman looks glum.
Here is Daddy in his car. Daddy is tall.
Look, Jane, look! Look at the dog! See him run!

Daddy looks very cross. Has he a gun?
Up milkman! Upmilkman! Over the wall!
Here is Peter. Here is Jane. They like fun.
Look, Jane, look! Look at the dog! See him run!

Well, there you go. That's a villanelle. I only mentioned it cause some of the lines in your people seem to repeat in meaning, and I think with some thoughtful placing and rewording it would make a nice villanelle.  

[caustic 0_0]

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[Sanguvixen]

Wow...way to go Caustic!

I love the Imagery in Stationary. Some of it I can relate too.

For some reason The Ballad Of Peanut Gorge made me laugh. Because it is humorous, or maybe I have a twisted sense of humor. That one is my favorite out of the bunch.

To Eliza was an interesting one. A question...which bottle did she use to pack her "Soul" into?

I love the last line. It pulls the rest of it together nicely.

You are very good with free verse Caustic. Keep the creative juices flowing!

EDIT: Yes I read all of them.

 

[caustic 0_0]

Sanguvixen

Wow...way to go Caustic!

I love the Imagery in Stationary. Some of it I can relate too.

For some reason The Ballad Of Peanut Gorge made me laugh. Because it is humorous, or maybe I have a twisted sense of humor. That one is my favorite out of the bunch.

To Eliza was an interesting one. A question...which bottle did she use to pack her "Soul" into?

I love the last line. It pulls the rest of it together nicely.

You are very good with free verse Caustic. Keep the creative juices flowing!

EDIT: Yes I read all of them.

Soul would be glass.

Thank you^^

And The Ballad is funny I guess, but my thoughts on things are usually a little darker even if I use sort of like a bitter humor.  

[Sanguvixen]

c a u s t i c

Sanguvixen

Wow...way to go Caustic!

I love the Imagery in Stationary. Some of it I can relate too.

For some reason The Ballad Of Peanut Gorge made me laugh. Because it is humorous, or maybe I have a twisted sense of humor. That one is my favorite out of the bunch.

To Eliza was an interesting one. A question...which bottle did she use to pack her "Soul" into?

I love the last line. It pulls the rest of it together nicely.

You are very good with free verse Caustic. Keep the creative juices flowing!

EDIT: Yes I read all of them.

Soul would be glass.

Thank you^^

And The Ballad is funny I guess, but my thoughts on things are usually a little darker even if I use sort of like a bitter humor.

Dark thoughts amuse me for some reason. Now I understand my amusement.

Oh, and your welcome.

 

[caustic 0_0]

I'll post more if I write more stuff.
I've never done anything but free verse, unless I had to for an assignment. 3nodding  

[Muaethia]

Great free verse, caustic! My favourite is The Ballad Of Peanut Gorge, it's so thought-provoking. I love it! Earthen is ace, too mrgreen  

[caustic 0_0]

Thanks!
I like Earthen too. I changed that one a lot. o.o It started out quite different about a year ago. xD