The Poetry of Emma

[Kharne Bloodhowler]

Written in the mathematical sound block style that is the quatrain stanza, with a wonderful topic that never gets old over time, I have to say that this is a wonderful piece.

I have to agree with the concept that these expensive gifts mean nothing and that the heart is an eternal gift. The reinforcement of the gifts from the narrator to the audience and what they are for is a sweet image to be truthful. Also, in regard to the meter, there are moments when particular stanzas actually have a certain meter to them.

Overall, there is order to an extent without being restrained by the standards of modern poetry (such as the sonnet or sestina). With the message delivered, I can feel the words and have felt the same as the speaker.

Kharne Bloodhowler, Vice-Captain  

[JudgesDaughter]

Thank you so much for your in-depth feedback. I don't get much of that, and I do appreciate it.  

[JudgesDaughter]

I'm Trying

I'm trying not to love you,
Telling myself you're just a friend,
Willing my heart to believe such lies,
Sealing my passion away within.

I'm trying not to miss you,
Ignoring the longing built up inside,
Contenting myself with your presence.
I mean, it's not as if you've died.

I'm trying to be your best friend,
Focusing on being there for you always;
Your happiness my first concern,
Denying myself submission to the haze.

I'm trying not to remember,
Remember all the times we've had,
How it felt when we were together,
Holding on to the present, not the past.

I'm trying not to cry,
Not letting tears betray my effort,
Hiding all of my weaknesses,
Gripping false hopes of my self-comfort.

I'm trying to follow the rules,
Determined to be good as can be.
If I behave, if I succeed,
Will you please come back to me?  

[Midnights_eclipse]

I love your poems... I may have a false impression, but your writing seems similar to mine. By this I mean that there seems to be one topic you are truly good at writing about and it comes rather naturally, whereas other topics may not be so easy, or the final product is not as high quality as those about the stronger topic.