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Posted: Fri Jul 15, 2005 7:57 pm
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Posted: Fri Jul 15, 2005 8:46 pm
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Posted: Fri Jul 15, 2005 9:27 pm
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Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2005 9:10 pm
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Posted: Tue Jul 19, 2005 6:34 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2005 9:26 am
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haha this is funny Aisu~ well what i think is you should improve on manga flow, i mean, when i read it, i was reading from right to left (for some reason) and i didnt really get the story until i knew i was reading it wrong. so, i suggest trying to make it easier to read.
your tones (background) is good, but maybe you could have put in more to it. especially he first collum, where the female character is saying that the map said it was this way. maybe finishing her body and adding background might have helped.
eyes also you could add more, maybe. and where the girls gets mad at the guy to shut up, you could have made it more dynamic and added a tone on this part. (look at naruto for instance, how sakura gets really mad at naruto. or the inner sakura, it makes her look really angry. -^__^-)
but then again, i can't make manga for beans, and so, i think this is great~ Made me laugh~ anyway, good job~ post the others soon~ heart
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Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2005 10:21 am
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KazehaneRio_FLAME haha this is funny Aisu~ well what i think is you should improve on manga flow, i mean, when i read it, i was reading from right to left (for some reason) and i didnt really get the story until i knew i was reading it wrong. so, i suggest trying to make it easier to read.
Oops. Sorry. I should have mentioned that it's the left to right instead of the traditional manga way (right to left). redface
Quote: your tones (background) is good, but maybe you could have put in more to it. especially he first collum, where the female character is saying that the map said it was this way. maybe finishing her body and adding background might have helped. eyes also you could add more, maybe. and where the girls gets mad at the guy to shut up, you could have made it more dynamic and added a tone on this part. (look at naruto for instance, how sakura gets really mad at naruto. or the inner sakura, it makes her look really angry. -^__^-) but then again, i can't make manga for beans, and so, i think this is great~ Made me laugh~ anyway, good job~ post the others soon~ heart
Okay, thanks! I'll keep those ideas in mind. 3nodding
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Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2005 11:41 am
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Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2005 8:15 pm
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Posted: Fri Jul 22, 2005 3:10 pm
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2005 8:24 am
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2005 2:03 pm
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Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2005 10:05 am
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Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2005 10:59 am
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Posted: Tue Aug 02, 2005 7:50 pm
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