A Note on Miriam

[Xahmen]

She was afraid of the world.
She didn't feel appreciated.
She wanted to recant her violence and anger.
She wouldn't admit it though.
Not even to herself.
She's dead now.
Lost her life at the end of a madman's calculated fists.
The world will miss her.

It started about two years ago.
Miriam met a man named David.
They fell in love.
She was with his child.
A car accident changed that.

Two months ago Miriam left David a letter on his pillow.
She had left him for another.
David wept for one day and one day only.

One month ago Miriam and David were packing Miriam's belongings.
They made love.
They ended up on the couch.
The bed.
The kitchen floor.
The shower.

David felt hope.
Miriam crushed it.

Two weeks ago Miriam stopped talking to David.

Two days ago David paid Miriam a visit.
They ******** initiated it.

When it was over she laughed at him and his emotional pain.

David went home and shot himself in the mouth.
He didn't die.
He didn't die.
David blacked out.

Yesterday David woke up with blood in his mouth.
Miriam had been beaten to death.
David's fingers were broken and bleeding.

A note on David.
He's riding the rails and heading towards Canada.
Perhaps there is salvation in the snow.  

[KirbyVictorious]

Two days ago David paid Miriam a visit.
They ******** is entirely unnecessary. Devoid of class.

But I love the format/syntax with this one.  

[Xahmen]

Actually, it stands out against the earlier mention of them making love Kirbs.

I could have said "They had sex again, but this time it was emotionless and meaningless."

But the line I used instead delivered the feeling without having to say it out like that.

Because there is a major difference between making love with a person, and ******** them.
I would know.

Having meaningless and disspasionate sex with someone sucks a lot, especially when the two of you were madly in love at one point.
Especially when you're still in love with the other person and they have no feeling towards you.

Yes, it wasn't classy, but it's the only way the line would have fit.
I'm sorry you don't like it, but it's the way things are (the subject, not the line)  

[KirbyVictorious]

I see now. Okay.  

[Voxxx]

That has got to be the longest "********" lecture I've ever seen. xp

I rather dislike Mariam.  

[BlackHawkGS]

Canada? The place with the trees and the bears?

But man... talk about explicit. It's unfortunate to watch some relationships go the route that you just described. "It's over between us." Two days later? Sex on the couch.

People are desperate for someone to love them back.  

[KirbyVictorious]

I dunno. Sex on the couch seems like too big an adventure to pass up over some silly breakup/divorce thing, riiiight?  

[Tak-Jak]

Oh how manipulative a woman can be, when she knows she holds the power over a man.

Every line represented a new power to me.
Every line... was a heart ache yet thrilling.