Could you lemmi know if these poems are okay?

[Black Hearted Princess]

My love lasts forever,
But he doesnt know,
I smile and say not loving me's okay.
He thinks I dont love him but dear lord he doesnt know,
I cant stop loving him and ill never show.
When he needs me ill gladly be there,
Not like that girl I cannot bear.
She uses and abuses,
I love and I care,
He likes her better,
Well thats his cross to bare.





Light in my eyes,
But sorrow in my soul,
The light hides the pain,
The betrayal gives someone something to gain,
I want to forget,
I dont want to know,
For my soul is torn beyond my repair,
My eyes cry blood red tears,
Those tears fall upon a ground darker then the seven hells.


Lemmi know what you think of them, please?  

[Otxanus Xanaphy]

they were bith really good. XD  

[Black Hearted Princess]

Thanks. xd  

[Toast Of Legend]

i really liked the second one, it was very good