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Tak-Jak
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 07, 2008 7:49 pm
Oh, I know the ways to make his knees
quiver. The Taj Mahal is nothing;
compared to the bed that I have made for him.

And he will never forget the honey jars
kept on our nightstand; the nights it trickled
down to the depths of my core.

Pleasure diamonds have a way
of sending you to Paphos; sinking in
to the vibrational waves of Venus.

No need to light candles, as we already burn
loud enough for all the neighbours to hear,
smile at, blush, and desperately long for.

He is the rain, and I am the desert. I thirst
for his sweet relief beneath the light
of the hunter's moon.

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Full Title: For The Boy Who Knew Me Only In Rushes.  
PostPosted: Mon Apr 07, 2008 8:02 pm
That was so incredibly sweet. I loved all the metaphors.  

KirbyVictorious


Tak-Jak
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 08, 2008 4:17 pm
Grazie.  
PostPosted: Tue Apr 08, 2008 6:06 pm
I adore the last paragraph.

My favorite line is

"sinking in
"to the vibrational waves of Venus."  

Reese_Roper


in the flicker.

PostPosted: Tue Apr 08, 2008 7:00 pm
wow. this is seething with passion. nicely done. i like the second stanza best =P  
PostPosted: Tue Apr 08, 2008 7:07 pm
Seething passion?

Hmm.. I like that.  

Tak-Jak
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Xahmen
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 08, 2008 8:23 pm
Like sex this much in real life, Rem?  
PostPosted: Wed Apr 09, 2008 12:22 pm
I find it can be either consider romantically love or sexual passion but the choice of words you use are most definitely amazing  

Renton Noah


Galladonsfire

PostPosted: Wed Apr 09, 2008 1:41 pm
aye the last paragraph was quite the zinger, I like this... good job! smile  
PostPosted: Wed Apr 09, 2008 2:53 pm
Zahmen
Like sex this much in real life, Rem?


rofl rofl rofl yep! rofl rofl rofl

Nah, writing about it is just as fun. ^^  

KirbyVictorious


Tak-Jak
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 09, 2008 3:26 pm
Not so much, but the idea.

I am not a fiend in anyways, if thats what your asking.  
PostPosted: Tue Apr 15, 2008 6:03 am
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Wow. . .
I've read and reread and rereread the poem and given myself time to think of a coherent repsonse and yet I can still manage little more than wow.
>.< This kinda makes me want to crawl into your bed and take you for myself. >.<

I wish I had your way with words.
I really like the stanza with the honey jars.

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Tak-Jak
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 15, 2008 6:57 am
I hope you like honey, because your welcome in my bed anytime.
whee twisted  
PostPosted: Thu Apr 17, 2008 5:16 am
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*air punch* Yessss!
So. . . uh. . . where exactly is your house again?

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