a poem i made just now as i type

[Univaga]

if i told u i LUVED u
would u repeat i do

if i told u my heart bled
would u stay when tears shed

if i said i cut wrist
would u say stay and assist

if i said please don't leave
would u look back at grief

and if i lost myself in tears
would u hold me and say u care  

[Zombified_Milk]

nice poem, but the ending stanza i think should still rhyme, like the rest of the poem, maybe you could say something like:
"If I lost myself, would you stare?
Or would you hold me, and say you care"

I dunno, do wat you want, thats the 1st thing i could think of off the top of my head  

[Ghost1124]

wow that was one of the best poems i ever read  

[x-silver-penguin-x]

... nice poem

ok here's a stupid little poem i wrote when my bf broke up wit me, hehe i suck at writing poems but i just decided 2 share it and yes i kno it dont rhyme xp

I thought you loved me,
But oh was I wrong.

You used me, abused me, and broke my heart.
I used to trust you but now I don’t.

I miss the days were we’d go out and play.
Now I see you with her.

You were my first and only love.
But now you’re nothing to me.

You broke me once, then broke me again.
I hate you with all everything I got.

But damn do I still love you.
I can’t get you out of my head.

What did you do to me?
I love you so much and I just can’t stop.

I’m stuck in the past and life is moving on without me.
I need help, I’m depressed, kill me now and end this pain.

*I BEG OF YOU*  

[thequackattack]

dont be so basic dude. i mean if your just writing stuff that rolls of the tongue, then try and use some vocab words. i guess you can take that as constructive criticism "live and learn then get loves"  

[walk like thunder]

Ok, fair enough if it's off the top of your head, but you should at least clean it up.
It's l-o-v-e-d not l-u-v-e-d but I'm sure you were well aware of that.
Your last stanza doesn't fit in, but if that's what you're going for, go ahead.
It's a wee bit simple.
And emo. Not in a good way.  

[eMojoJojo]

i could rite poems but
i cant rite a good poem like urs on the top of my head  

[Romanroaming]

nice poems