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Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 1:55 pm
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Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 1:57 pm
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Kharne Bloodhowler Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Jul 22, 2008 5:15 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 23, 2008 6:04 pm
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Can I steal your comment and use it as my own, Kharne? hehe You said what I wanted to. No fair.
Of course, I find it funny that you address your posts like that. -rolls eyes-
Isis375: Captain. See how silly? I'm just messing with you. :] Anyways...
On to the purpose!
Hi there, Mel. Welcome to the guild!
I have this love of vampires, and I've always wanted to be one. I like the taste of blood, although I don't know if I'd actually drink it. The idea of vampires intrigues me, and for some reason always brings my mind to romance. I don't think of the horror, just the love and the eternity. I'd love to live forever, mostly because I'm afraid of death, well, of losing people. So, in that case, if I were ever to become a vampire, I'd change my loved ones. Anyways, I'm going off into the wrong direction. The point is your poem.
It's really lovely. Like Kharne said, fantastic imagery and wonderful choice of words. I like the topic, as you probably figured out. I like the rhyme. Not sure if you'd call it slant or not. At this moment, I don't know what you'd call it, but I really like it used here. It's like, not perfect rhyming, but the sounds still pop out. It also has a nice flow, though you might add punctuation so the reader knows exactly how it's to be read. The way that I read it, just pausing after each line, seemed to work, but others might have difficulty. Overall, a very nice story portrayed very well. Makes me think of Twilight, or maybe Vampire Kisses, actually.
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