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Tak-Jak
Vice Captain

PostPosted: Sun Aug 24, 2008 11:06 am
1.
We are mutilated sunflowers hiding in hollow trees.

2.
I could trace every inch of your skin, which I imagine feels something like the surface of the moon, and I still would not be able to locate the part of you that can see me through this fog. The lighthouse you promised to always be.

3.
The others thought we spoke a different language due to our hidden meanings that pulsated beneath every syllable uttered. The worlds we created in the most simple of words. Words like molasses, sunflowers, icicles. They held everything.

4.
But the nuns are choking on the sound of swallowing their own tongues. And I sit beside them, legs crossed, hoping someone has a microphone to spare, an offered exit for this gurgling choir.

5.
The harp could never sound like a banjo, and perhaps this is the moment where we slipped. The moment I decided I needed mud pies and grass stains while you needed sanitizer and earmuffs. And although we may never sing the same tune, you will forever have a place in my symphony.

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The first 3 were written on June 17th, the other two were written now.

Strange how time keeps moving but people stay in the same place.

"i loved his secret places
but i can't go anymore"

-Tori Amos, Northern Lad  
PostPosted: Sun Aug 24, 2008 11:10 am
This makes me sad...I love the imagery and your writing is beautiful, as usual, but it is a melancholy piece.  

KirbyVictorious


Tak-Jak
Vice Captain

PostPosted: Mon Aug 25, 2008 6:43 pm
Thank you loverly, tis sad indeed.  
PostPosted: Mon Aug 25, 2008 6:48 pm
The first moves me most, for obscure reasons.

Melancholy indeed.
 

d e s d e m o n o
Crew


Voxxx

PostPosted: Mon Aug 25, 2008 7:09 pm
I don't think I've ever witness you write anything that could be deemed anything less than melancholy; it suits you.

THAT

Words like molasses, sunflowers, icicles. They held everything.

spoke to me the most.  
PostPosted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:45 pm
I like melancholy. Thank you both.


Oh, Voxxy. I am writing something new, very sensual and overtly sexual.
Plus, I am adding a new twist instead of my normal, Greek mythology.

Are you ready for this.... Hawaiian mythology, or rather lore!  

Tak-Jak
Vice Captain


Voxxx

PostPosted: Wed Aug 27, 2008 2:02 pm
Ah! Like Laka and Kapo and Pele? I freaking love you!

(!!! <-- Extra exclamation points, that's how excited I am! <-- And one more. Just cause. heart )  
PostPosted: Wed Aug 27, 2008 6:17 pm
Pele, actually. whee  

Tak-Jak
Vice Captain

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