Help me with my (Mandarin) Chinese please!!!!!

[Suicide Skittle]

I'm having a final in my Chinese class and part of the final is to type up a script and perform it in front of the class.

I was hoping you could read through it and correct any mistakes I probably made.

Please? I would be very grateful!

我爱你！<3

1 你好
ni hao
2你好
ni hao
1 好久不见，你怎么样？
Hao jiu bu jian, ni zenmeyang?
2 很好。你哪里去？
Hen hao. Ni nali qu?
1 这站公共汽车。我去商店买有的东西。
Zhe zhan gonggn qiche. Wo qu shangdian mai youde dongxi.
2 是吗？我也去买东西。你去哪个商店？
Shi ma? Wo ye qu mai dongxi. Ni qu na ge shangdian.
1 Walmart和贸易中心。
Walmart he mao yi zhong xin.
2 很好。我去贸易中心买新电话给我的宿舍。
Hen hao. Wo qu mao yi zhong xin mai xin dianhua gei wo de sushe.
1 我想买一纸币给中文课。也想买新衬衫和信裙子给音乐会跟我的朋友。
Wo xiang mai yi zhi be gei zhongwen ke. Ye xiang mai xin chenshan he xin quinzi gei yinyuihui gen wo de pengyou.
2 你的男朋友吗？
ne de nan pengyou ma?
1 请别笑我！ 是，他是我的男朋友。很帅。这是红线公共汽车。
Qing bie xiao wo! Shi ta shi wo de nan penyou. Hen shuai. Zhe shi hong xian gonggong qiche.
2 红线公共汽车太慢了，很麻烦。我们坐绿线公共汽车吧。
Hong xian gonggong qiche tai man le. Hen mafan. Women zuo lu xian gonggong qiche ba.
1 很好。什么时候到？
Hen hao. Shenme shihou dao?
2 以后七分
Yihou qi fen.
1 太不好了。我不能去买一杯茶。
Tai bu hao le. Wo meiyou shijian qu mai yi bei cha.
2 没问题。走路太快了吧。
Mei wenti. Zoulu tai kuai diar zou.
1．。。。算了
Suan le.

2 我们一起去买东西吗？
Women yiqi qu mai dongxi ma?
1 很好！ 这要玩儿。
Hen hao! Zhe yao wanr
2 我们去这个商店巴， 他的衣服很漂亮很便宜。
Women qu zhe ge shangdian ba, ta de yifu hen piaoliang he pianyi.
1 很好。我虽然喜欢这件裙子可是大小不好。
Hen hao. Wo suiran xihuan zhe jian qunzi keshi daxiao bu hao.
2 是吗？你想都大的。
Shi ma? Ni xiang duo da de?
1 我((相))中好的。((I know wrong character!))
Wo xiang zhong hao de.
2我觉得有那大小根黑色的。
Wo juede you na daxiao gen heise de
1 我不喜欢黑((死))的。我喜欢红色的。((again wrong character!))
Wo bu xihuan heisi de. Wo xihuan hongse de.
2 那算了。你觉得这双鞋紫色很漂亮吗？ 我要买。
Na suan le. Ne juede zhe shuang xie zise hen piaoliang ma? Wo yao mai.
1 多钱?
Duo qian?
2 不知道。太贵了！
Bu jidao... ta gui le!
1 那我们去吧。
Na women qu ba.
2 很好。
Hen hao.

Also the most important things are the characters. If I screwed up the the Pinyin it doesn't really matter.

What we're trying to say

1 Hi
2 Hi
1 Long time no see. How are you?
2 Good. Where are you going?
1 The bus top. I'm going to the store to buy some things.
2Really? I am too. Which store?
1 Walmart and the mall.
2 Good. I'm going to the mall to get a new telephone for my dorm.
1 I want to get some pens for Chinese class. I also need a new shirt and skirt for going to a concert with my friend.
2 Your boy friend?
1 Don't laugh at me! Yes he is my boyfriend and he's very handsome. Here's the red bus.
2 The red bus takes too long and is troublesome. Let's take the green bus.
1 Okay, when will it arrive?
2 In 7 minutes
1 So inconvienent. I can't go get tea to drink.
2 No problem walk very fast.
1 Forget it

2 Do you want to go shopping together?
1 Sure it'll be fun?
2 Let's go to that store the clothes are pretty and cheap.
1 Ok. I really like this skirt but it's the wrong size.
2 Really what size do you need?
1 I need medium size.
2 Oh I think they have that size in black.
1 I don't like black I like red.
2 Oh never mind. Aren't these purple shoes pretty? I'm going to buy them.
1 How much are they?
2 I don't know... OH! Way too expensive
1 Let's go then.
2 Okay.  

[cold_blooded_chick]

1 我想买一纸币(支笔)给中文课。（maybe more appropriate would be: 我想买一支笔上中文课用。）
也想买新衬衫和信(新)裙子给音乐会跟我的朋友，（和朋友去音乐会时穿。<= wear them to the concert with friend)

2 以后(delete)七分(钟）

1 太不好(方便）了。我不能去买一杯茶。

2 没问题。走路太（得了特）快了（点）吧

1 很好。我虽然喜欢这件（条）裙子可是大小不好（合适）。

2 是吗？你想都（多）大的。

1 我((相))(想）中（号）好的（了）。

2我觉得有那大小根黑色的。 （黑色有中号的）

1 多（少）钱?

1 那我们去（走）吧。

The characters in brackets are to recommended to replace characters in red.  

[Suicide Skittle]

Okay, thank you so much! It was really helpful!  

[cold_blooded_chick]

Suicide Skittle

Okay, thank you so much! It was really helpful!

4laugh  

[a- K0KO-]

The words I replaced are in bold, and the ones in strike aren't needed. C:

2 很好。你去哪里？

1 很好。什么时候到？

2 那算了。你觉得这双紫色的鞋很漂亮吗？ 我想买。

2 不知道。。。啊！太贵了！

1 那我们走吧。

2 很好。

 

[iiiBunny]

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