Prompt #15

[Marshy82]

I could never forget that day. I could never forget the pain, feeling as if knives were being dragged across my skin. . . The curse of never forgeting. The curse of me, Zuri. The feel of never breathing, the feel, as if I couldn't move. . . I remember how I felt as if I was being trapped, held there forever. Forever. . . Forever never forgeting. . .

I don't think it was all that good. sad  

[Collote]

This isn't bad. It's short and it gets to the point. I like it. [:

About the ellipses. If you use an ellipses for the end of a sentence, you have to use 4 dots (3 for the ellipses, 1 for the period).

Also, maybe you should say "I will never forget that day. I will never..." instead of using could. Just a suggestion.  

[Angel_Child_Of_Grace]

MUST.READ.STORY.BEHIND.IT!!!!!!! *chews finger nails off in anticipation*  

[serephemeral]

I'm interested. What's the story behind this? I'd elaborate, and maybe use a few less elipses. Other than that, it's a most definate start.