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 Posted: Thu Jul 30, 2009 12:18 pm
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Don't let the crap first chapter put you off. I've never been any good at beginnings...
Chapter 1: An irrefusable offer
Down a dark alleyway lived two orphan twin brothers called Alexander and Byron. They seemed to be in their mid-teens, but only their parents knew that. They were probably dead though.
Byron ran into the alley, his grubby shoes splashing in the muddy puddles.
'Hey Alex, look what I found!' Byron held a pamphlet towards Alexander. He took it and read: Tired of the dismal life you lead in the city? Want to escape to a better place? Leave behind poverty and famine and come to the Happy Haven! You'll be treated to free food, shelter, bedding, and entertainment all in our high security luxury location! All you need to do is turn up at the tower in the center of Blackburn Forest (you can't miss it) and sign the contract! And remember it's ABSOLUTELY FREE!
Then there was a large block of small-print; but it was impossible to make out.
'Seems rather fishy to me.' said Alexander, 'I mean, why would they be giving all that away for free?'
'What, so you want to be living on the streets your whole life? This is our only chance Alex! Besides, half the city is going at this rate. It's an offer nobody can refuse!'
'But-'
'What's the harm in having a look eh? We can come back if it's suspicious. It's time to live like kings Alex!'
Alexander sighed. 'How are we we gonna get there? Blackburn Forest is miles away, I saw it on a map. It'd take weeks to get there on foot!'
'We can just hitch a ride on someone's carriage. I'm sure old Henry wouldn't mind.'
'When's he leaving?'
'Tomorrow at nine in the morning. He's bringing his wife along too.'
'Tomorrow?! That's a bit soon!'
'The sooner the better.' Byron smiled to himself. He went to sleep dreaming of a life of luxury at Happy Haven. Alexander couldn't get to sleep. He kept worrying. There had to be a catch. Probably a huge one. And then there was all that small-print on the pamphlet. He didn't know a lot about small-print, but that much of it couldn't be good.
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Posted: Fri Jul 31, 2009 1:48 am
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Eloquent Conversationalist
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Posted: Fri Jul 31, 2009 5:52 am
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Posted: Fri Jul 31, 2009 6:05 am
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Posted: Fri Jul 31, 2009 6:14 am
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Posted: Fri Jul 31, 2009 6:18 am
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Posted: Fri Jul 31, 2009 6:19 am
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Posted: Fri Jul 31, 2009 6:22 am
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Super Cheesio Kirbythecreampuff No. no. They go to this place and live like kings but after a while they realise that slaves do all the work. Then a mysterious illness goes through that they realise they brought and the slaves and some of the normal people somehow survive. THEN the slaves join together in a rebellion led by these two guys and they kill the people controlling the slaves and take over to start a new life for themselves. Wrong again. In fact, Kuzo was closer. |
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Posted: Fri Jul 31, 2009 10:40 am
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Posted: Fri Jul 31, 2009 10:54 am
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