A story almost on its way to a publisher!

[sethrenoth]

I almost have this story ready to be checked out by an editor. Here is a small peice

The Village of Town Town (No name decided yet) IS a simple village of farmers, and merchants. The village's houses are made of straw and twig, the roads are nothing more than well beaten dirt, and the village its self is surrounded by a beautiful forrest (Forrest of Day). All is peaceful in this little village and things rarely go aray, but on this unforunate day firey arrows rained from the sky. Black billows of ash and brimstone billowed in a sign of its attackers, The Dark Age Knights. They came bursting from the smoke and ash with not even a war cry, cutting down the villagers with their rusted iron swords and axes. Their very pressence brought terror into the once peaceful villager's hearts. They could bore wholes into your soul with their firey red eyes, and they felt no pain for they themselves are nothing but ash and brimstone animating armour and weapons to their use to do whatever evil deed that needed to be done. There seemed to be no hope until a man clad in a black cloak wearing black leather armour come out of the forrest with a silver sheild and sword in hand cutting the Dark Age Knights down. With each slash, bash, and stab another of the Dark Demons burst into smoke and armour fell. The enemy seemed no match for him. Yet has the battle continued the myesterous warrior was quickly out numbered and quickly being overrun. To be continued...  

[Kasi Karra]

Your grammar could use quite a bit of work. Your spelling in places needs a little work.

Your story looks like it will have an interesting story line and plot, but a lot of the story is only making sense because I'm able to imagine it, not because I'm reading it. Does that make sense?

For example: I can imagine a guy cleaving down flaming characters and quickly getting surrounded, but the way you're describing it, it sounds like the guy is doing great and confidently cleaving everyone down and now all of a sudden he's suffering from too many monsters and is about to die.  

[sethrenoth]

That is my talent, dont worry about all the simple stuf htats just because I was recalling it from my mind, and like had 5 min to write it real quick