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Fingerless Gloves ~ A collection of Poetry Please review!

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Layla Oleander

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PostPosted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 5:18 pm


So yeah... I am gonna post poetry here. I hope you like it.
About the collection's name... I chose a random thing I am wearing often~ biggrin XD
I guess I will post my first piece now~
It is called 'Back when' as you can and will see why~

Quote:
Back when we were young.
Back when things were alright.
Back when we were happy.
Back when we would play all day.
Back when we would hang out at school.
Back when we would never cry.
Back when we were best friends forever.
Back when we had fights every week.
Back when singing was a sport.
Back when we were flexible.
Back when we were like sisters.
Back when we would run.
Back when we felt wind in our hair.
Back when we were content with eating pepperoni and melted cheese.
Back when we were still innocent.
Back when our hair was longer.
Back when we were stupid.
Back when towns made us giggle.
Back when our energy was endless.
Back when we had the same teacher.
Back when nothing could make us part.
Back when we were just like sisters.
Back when you taught me how to dress right.
Back when we were healthy.
Back when you could eat.
Back when I felt sane.
Back when you could walk freely.
Back when we were invincible.
Back when you went to school.
Back when our only troubles were reading books.
Back when we were just children.
I wish I could go back to those better times.


It sounds depressing as s**t now that I read it over.
This is about me and my best friend.
We use to goto the same school. Had the same class. Got held back together. Played together. We were just like sisters.
But when we went to middle school, we were separated. She had to get a surgery over the summer and well... Some bad s**t happened and she almost died and went into a coma instead of only being in the hospitable for about a week, she was in it for most likely, over two months. Currently she is in a wheelchair at home being nursed back to health.

Okay~ Please review~ biggrin
PostPosted: Mon Nov 29, 2010 11:27 am


It's very beautiful. It may not mean much to the person reading it, and perhaps they may even related. But when read, one can feel the feelings that were poured into it to fill the empty words. On a scale of 1-10, I'd give it a 7. Very good smile

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PostPosted: Mon Nov 29, 2010 6:15 pm


Thank you! biggrin
PostPosted: Tue Nov 30, 2010 8:32 pm


I agree. couldn't say it better myself. I'd go to say 82.50 out of 100. it's even got a very poetic style written in, so it is neatly formed, professional, etcetera.

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PostPosted: Tue Nov 30, 2010 8:35 pm


Thanks~ biggrin
Even though I do not know half the words you just said:
Thank you! biggrin
PostPosted: Tue Nov 30, 2010 8:36 pm


o_O; realy?

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PostPosted: Tue Nov 30, 2010 8:41 pm


Yeah~
(And in no means do I mean to sound like an English teacher but... you're spelling really wrong~ D: It annoys me so much that I may have to punch the name stealer tomorrow~ D:<)
PostPosted: Tue Nov 30, 2010 8:59 pm


heart You're awesome Layla heart I hate it when people misspell words. Or misuse grammar.

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PostPosted: Tue Nov 30, 2010 9:05 pm


So are you now~ : D
I know right?! It is so terrible!
I barely can read Dave's posts without being angered~ biggrin
PostPosted: Wed Dec 01, 2010 6:47 pm


xd I'm stubborn sometimes. I spell Realy with only a single "L" because it seems to only need one. it just feels correct.

and as for most of my other words, they are not incorrect. just older versions which still seem more proper. Honour, for example. or Worthe. or Shoppe.

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PostPosted: Wed Dec 01, 2010 6:52 pm


I like the way you spell Honour.
It reminds me of Colour.
But, if I ever see you say 'Learned' or 'Dreamed' or 'Spelled' I will destroy you~ biggrin
It is 'Learnt' 'Dreamt' and 'spelt'
D:<
Rant on spelling over!
PostPosted: Wed Dec 01, 2010 7:56 pm


pfft! xd Consistency, I say!

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PostPosted: Wed Dec 01, 2010 8:05 pm


hmm?~
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