not much of a love poem

[Randome_Co0kiez]

Most of you dont know me, im a girl who has been in hell and back tryna put my lifeback on track
Right now its spiralling out of control, because this guy just wouldnt hold, didnt fight, doesnt share, Turning gay, now acts like he doesnt care Please enjoy

Im so lonley, There is a vode in my heart an empty feeling.
Now a days all i do is lay down staring at the cieling
Told him to give me time, but it was to much
Now i think i lost him when his hand i should have touched
I use to be anxious when he i.m's me back
But now, he doesnt like telling me things or even talking around me in fact
I miss him, we use to be close
For all i know with out me he might overdose
I care to much for him to die
but i geuss he is that type of guy
Im starting to love him when hes starting to walk
i will miss you and love you every single day

~ Ms.Lonley  

[Beckygan]

That's quite a depressing poem. We're your fellow guild members, so we can help you if you wish. I pray you will find peace in your life.

Now, since this is a Writer's Club House, let's have a look at your poem. Have you thought about monitoring the syllables per line in your poem? This would add more rhythm to your poem, thus, strengthening the message you're portraying. And I have to say again, that's quite a morbid poem.