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Vengeful Ghost: a spirit of a deceased person being who returns from the afterlife to seek revenge for a cruel, unnatural or unjust death.

Black Tiger: a rare colour variant of the tiger (so not a distinct species). So-called black tigers are due to pseudo-melanism. Pseudo-melanistic tigers have thick stripes so close together that the tawny background is barely visible between stripes. Such tigers are said to be getting more common due to inbreeding.

Pre-ghost life:
When she was just a cub, Clara was spotted by a group of humans making their way through the forest. A few phone calls and several hours later, a larger group of humans closed in on Clara and captured her. The details after getting tranquilized were a bit sketchy to the young (and not yet dead) tiger, but she found herself being shipped from place to place and being surrounded by large crowds of humans. It was a rather miserable life, being cooped up and being fed who knows what, and all she did was sit in the cramped cage day after day after day. Clara spent several years like this. She was about the age of a young adolescent (by tiger standards) when one day, the train she was being carried in got ambushed by some people who were most likely after her uniquely-colored pelt. She struggled against them with all her might, taking down a few of the members of the group, but she was weak from malnutrition and lack of exercise, and it was hopeless against humans with their technology. Shortly after, she found herself in Halloween.



Minipets:




On Clara's birthday, her friend named Shu brought over a box that contained a cat. She adopted it, and although it was a troublesome little creature, she trained it and took care of it and it grew. And then one day, it grew a little horn, and Clara was really surprised AND THEN EVENTUALLY IT GREW INTO THIS LITTLE MONSTER which is apparently the offspring of a cat and a unicorn. Yup.

[reserved for Clara's lock solo thingy]

1: revenge
2: choice

edit: oh man you are screwed Clara.

Um... you wanted a cooler name for your fear ability, how about Hei hu quan? Literally it means black tiger fist. sweatdrop

Yeah, I am too actually. I only know that one because my dad's a black belt... XD

U SAID CRITS SO U GETS DEM

AS FAR AS APPROVAL GOES-
She will need a natural ability- My suggestion might be that given her form of death she has developed a thick skin effect- her skin can change 'color' to that or a normal tiger or to a skinless tiger. Or perhaps she has the ability to turn fully intangible- thus making cages impossible to contain her.
THAT IS ACTUALLY ALL I CAN SEE FOR POSSIBLE APPROVAL PROBLEMS? The rest is just based on character.


;A; I hope what I write makes sense otl otl

One thing that I notice starting out is that you put a lot of emphasis on what she was pre death- an Rper shouldn't need to read your character's history to understand their personality. I don't say this as a 'history doesn't matter' but more the fact that when you write a personality it should place emphasis on WHO that character is NOW. It shouldn't use vague details from their past. The point is more to give the draw of 'why you want to interact with my character'.

An easy way to help this is to take your profile and remove any and all instances where you cite or allude to the past or some form of 'outside' information. Remember- your reader knows nothing about your character. They don't know details about how they will act alone or in groups, or if they are cynical or more optimistic. They don't necessarily need to know why or how, some details, such as, 'growing up in a home of 10 siblings' might contribute to a trait, in the end, that fact doesn't create nor define the trait, (if that make sense).

Aside from the exersise above to help flesh more of her personality out, try the journalistic questions- Who, what, where, when, why, and how.
If she is violent:
Who triggers it (emotions? phrases? emotes?), what level of violence happens (does it vary case by case?), where does it happen (only in certain places? under certain conditions), when it happens how does it effect her relationships with others (does she apologize? Does she not care? has she come to terms with her violent nature?), why is violence a required or core trait (is this trait something that has ALWAYS existed in her- is it something that will never change or be very slow to change?), finally- how does this trait play into making her an appealing character I want to RP with.

The catch is keeping to the rules of the first exercise, keeping the past from defining the current, and keeping your outside information from effecting the descriptions used to define who she is. The big question- 'how does this trait play into making her an appealing character others want to RP with' is basically, your end goal. its THAT part that you have to aim for.

Again, as an RPer, you want to create something that will look dynamic and engaging to a number of people with open ended ideas from which to springboard possible plots and RPs. The more you focus on her past, or one trait- the more you 'shut down' outside ideas, which tend to make a character, even if diverse and dynamic underneath, come off as too much of one thing.

You have a lot of information, good information at that, but most of it falls under things from pre-death and are reactionary traits, and it gets lost under all of it. They also appear fairly negative in the sense that she isn't the type to feel comfortable with others and whatnot and thats where the emphasis is right now. I realize I'd given likely a lot of stuff for you to digest, but I can tell you have a good grasp of just who your character is, it's just the matter of getting it down on paper so to speak.

Try some of the stuff above and then move onto balancing- for every 'negative' trait, find one that is positive- what would make her an appealing character, a good friend or open up a way for multiple social interactions, (remember hobbies are not personalities!). She's violent but has a deep sense of right and wrong- That trait IS a positive one, and writing about it and bringing more emphasis on how it is a good thing will help your character appear more dynamic and appealing to others.

WHILE I REALIZE A LOT OF THIS MIGHT SEEM DAUNTING- It's actually more just a matter of separation and sorting the information you already have. I can tell Clara has a number of different traits and qualities, but I'm also looking at her with a long critical eye versus a fast once over which leaves a different impression. You have a great character, it's just a matter of making her personality really 'pop'.

You're welcome ;; I GET WORDY A LOT SO I WORRY

I WOULD SAYYYYY @ questions-
1-It's kind of hard to say since every writer is different and so is every reader. My personal take is go for Personality-> causes (but try to keep at bare minimum and if you don't HAVE to cite history then flat out, don't add it)-> reactions/examples of. LIKE

Because Timmy grew up with fairly odd parents who were eccentrics and didn't conform to society and so people often didn't take well to them and their lifestyle he became very odd as a result and now will speak to himself when solving problems

vrs

Timmy speaks to himself, which can often appear odd. Growing up with his fairly odd parents it never was much an issue, but for those who don't know him, it can be slightly jarring. He does it without thinking, as to him, verbal problem solving is just how things are done, it's what you do to make sense of otherwise odd things that life may throw at you.

if that helps??
It's kind of less is more rule. The less you rely on the outside factor, the more you can get from the core factors/workings.

and you technically don't have to change XD, personality is secondary with approvals. YOU CAN TECH LEAVE AS IS IF YOU WANT.

2- You can change it to point 0 size font, set it in a quote box- I do stuff on word and save to my comp- or google docs!

A simple thing is just BULLET POINT IT OUT!~ and from there, build. Um, idk if this helps otl