Writer's Block (Short Story/Prose)

[NovaKing]

KirbyVictorious

No, it's my dearest friends. They take French class, and it IS French, silly, I'm part French and I won't say freedomfries, I won't I won't I won't!

you mean their in freedom class and it is freedom silly and your part freedom and you wont say french fries

lol lol lol funiest campaign ever! its ridiculous.

man i cant wait to take freedom class so i can do freedom home work every night.


[sorry, i actually love everyone im only kidding]  

[KirbyVictorious]

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[NovaKing]

KirbyVictorious

domokun domokun domokun domokun domokun domokun domokun domokun

you know a freedom scienctist was the first to carry out a succesful measurment of the speed of sound -sniggers and runs away...giggling-  

[Voxxx]

I really did like the piece. It was very well done, and something new, unique.

However, your opening is a bit sketchy.

I hate it! she thought. The constant rebellion of my characters! Talk to me, damn it! Tell me your story. Please.

You could make that more emotional with some italics and maybe more spacing?

I hate it! she thought, The constant rebellion of her characters.

Talk to me, damn it! Tell me your story.

Please?  

[Merenwen99]

Voxxx

I really did like the piece. It was very well done, and something new, unique.

However, your opening is a bit sketchy.

I hate it! she thought. The constant rebellion of my characters! Talk to me, damn it! Tell me your story. Please.

You could make that more emotional with some italics and maybe more spacing?

I hate it! she thought, The constant rebellion of her characters.

Talk to me, damn it! Tell me your story.

Please?

Thanks for critiquing. I did have italics. . . but I forgot to fix them when I put this on Gaia. Thanks for pointing that out. I always italicize speech. I think though that I'll leave it as one line. Thank you.  

[Minyaagar]

Great piece.
Writers block gets me too.
Though I find myself talking the stories out to myself when my mind isn't as busy and once I have figured out which way I want to go with a story I will sit down and write it out. But most times I just have to contemplate the story and get into the characters' heads so that I can go on with a story.