Another attempt at a song.

[Rellik San]

Ok so heres my other attempt at song writing: Yes I know, its rap.


Bringing down a nation,
Showin' 'em agitation,
Given 'em my vocation,
And thats before I'm on the station.


Gonna bring down your life,
And i won't even use a knife,
I got you all runin' scarred,
With jus' my own words.


Tellin' us your lies,
Actin' civilised,
Wanted us to obey,
So now you better pray.


Bringing down the city,
Well I ain't got no pity,
This noise you label shitty,
Is gonna tear down your city,


Open up your third eye,
You can see worlds cry,
This plague won't die,
That we call society (will be pronounced 'soci-tie' to fit the rhyming scheme)


You roll into town,
expectin' me to lay down,
But I stand tall,
Ain't no way I'll ever fall,


Tellin' us your lies,
Actin' civilised,
Wanted us to obey,
So now you better pray.


Bringing down the city,
Well I ain't got no pity,
This noise you label shitty,
Is gonna tear down your city,



Thats it so far, -__- I know its s**t.  

[-Isel-]

I could see some melodic death metal band (see: Children of Bodom) performing a song with lyrics like that.

Or a sleaze-rock band.  

[blazingwinds]

wow thats awesome!! i see like papa roach or lost prophets doing that. i love it. but just remember that you dont have to have a set rhyme scheme. thats the beauty of art. no rules at all. but i love the message and i love the way you presented it. your words really express the general feeling of fustration and the whole like idk how to explain it... the like 'dont turn your back or youll regret it' thing i guess... idk i cant explain it very well.... lol sry?  

[Shadow God]

I'm not a fan of rap by any stretch, but that wasn't bad.  

[Rellik San]

blazingwinds

wow thats awesome!! i see like papa roach or lost prophets doing that. i love it. but just remember that you dont have to have a set rhyme scheme. thats the beauty of art. no rules at all. but i love the message and i love the way you presented it. your words really express the general feeling of fustration and the whole like idk how to explain it... the like 'dont turn your back or youll regret it' thing i guess... idk i cant explain it very well.... lol sry?

I was thinking something more like Reveille, Clawfinger or Limp Bizkit (sig/oth era) when I wrote it.

And I think I get what you mean.  

[TEE WAS HERE]

hmmm... not bad... i like verse 2 the most...