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Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2007 11:42 pm
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Posted: Sun Jul 15, 2007 9:00 am
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Posted: Sat Jul 21, 2007 12:07 pm
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Posted: Fri Nov 30, 2007 7:41 pm
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Posted: Sat Dec 01, 2007 10:28 am
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I agree with Suicide, on the point of the 'freezie' line making it sound like a documentary, and there was one other line, about the Djarum Blacks that seemed out-of-place... how they were made with cloves, so the nicotine lasted longer? But uh. I think that informational, ironic type of writing could work very, veerry well in this piece, but you'd need it to be more consistent.
Other than that, I liked it a lot. :3 The character's casual view of the girlfriend's (?) death is haunting, and your prosey description, of the drugs especially - i.e. 'snowcapped mountains' - are gorgeous. Great job. heart
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Posted: Tue Dec 04, 2007 8:45 am
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