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Posted: Sun Sep 09, 2007 7:51 pm
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Posted: Sun Sep 09, 2007 7:58 pm
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The rhyme scheme is really off in this one, but I love the concept. It's a very dark, melancholy view of a love.
To me, it's about being in a relationship that you know is bad for you, but you can't do anything about it: Perhaps because the concept of love is hypnotizing, perhaps because others are watching.
Make what you will of it, though. It can mean whatever you want it to mean.
Valse Noire De Coeur
Into the starlight, We danced. The moon at our throats At the thought Of romance. We bled into the sand. And crimson eyes Watched as Our hopes were banned. Young love, a glimmer, And everyone romancing. Take my hand, The world grows dimmer As everyone is dancing.
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Posted: Mon Sep 10, 2007 9:28 pm
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EmilyScissorhands The rhyme scheme is really off in this one, but I love the concept. It's a very dark, melancholy view of a love. To me, it's about being in a relationship that you know is bad for you, but you can't do anything about it: Perhaps because the concept of love is hypnotizing, perhaps because others are watching. Make what you will of it, though. It can mean whatever you want it to mean. Valse Noire De Coeur Into the starlight, We danced. The moon at our throats At the thought Of romance. We bled into the sand. And crimson eyes Watched as Our hopes were banned. Young love, a glimmer, And everyone romancing. Take my hand, The world grows dimmer As everyone is dancing.
I absolutely enjoyed this piece! You have a lot of talent. I wish I could put my finger on what made it so superb, but it may just be as simple as your command of words.
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Posted: Mon Sep 17, 2007 5:31 pm
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AntoniaMerEnfant EmilyScissorhands The rhyme scheme is really off in this one, but I love the concept. It's a very dark, melancholy view of a love. To me, it's about being in a relationship that you know is bad for you, but you can't do anything about it: Perhaps because the concept of love is hypnotizing, perhaps because others are watching. Make what you will of it, though. It can mean whatever you want it to mean. Valse Noire De Coeur Into the starlight, We danced. The moon at our throats At the thought Of romance. We bled into the sand. And crimson eyes Watched as Our hopes were banned. Young love, a glimmer, And everyone romancing. Take my hand, The world grows dimmer As everyone is dancing. I absolutely enjoyed this piece! You have a lot of talent. I wish I could put my finger on what made it so superb, but it may just be as simple as your command of words.
Thank you. ^_^
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Posted: Mon Sep 17, 2007 5:33 pm
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Posted: Thu Nov 08, 2007 8:44 pm
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Posted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 2:16 am
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Posted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 10:54 pm
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Posted: Sun Nov 11, 2007 3:55 am
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Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2008 11:31 am
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Posted: Mon Jan 28, 2008 10:22 pm
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Since this is apparently the spot to post one's poetry, I might just belt out an old one for the sake of doing it.
Never did title it.
It doesn't make much sense to have to laugh yourself to sleep, It's asinine to salvage all the pieces buried deep; My soul awaits, my heart abates when eyes can barely see, My sins are retroactive and my head is killing me; There's one of us that's ragged, One of us that's clean, One in need of thrills, another still of dopamine; We're running out of upside-down, Direction's all the same-- A brand of rationale that we can all just simply feign. Allocate. Exasperate. Inspire and control. They tell us of diseases that can rot away our souls. We found a god inside the box that keeps the mass in line, And he told us true salvation was to enervate our minds. To give up eating apples. To give up ten percent. To kneel, sign his cross, and never question what it meant. My eyes transfixed on pixels, and my head, it throbbed with pain, And the plethora of god-hairs split and formed as though in vain; The gel that caked the space between the strands of flowing twine Connected to his hands and feet in ten suspending lines; And then I saw the star of six the weavery unfurled, And so I caught another plot to take over the world.
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