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[NovaKing]

Ah hail
to
pro-
crast-
in-
a-
tion

most deviant

of human

devices

which allows the mind

to T P]

(-do is) [S

O

and H

NK](-

[T

I

of the things it could do besides

)(of)the task at A
D](-
[H

N

)(which you were so humorously anxious about in the first place)

and all because it tricks the person
in-
to
thi-
nk-
ing

that their accomplishment will never
come
and that through that their effort
is hardly worth it


the best part about it is
that all your suffering
could be so simply remedied

I’ll tell you silly humans this,
but only for a sneer,
that you only need to breath
and it will all seem clear

and then
to bring things into focus
all you need to-  

[NovaKing]

this one was inspired by E.E. Cummings, and by my failure to do what the narrator (whom I plan to draw as an imp by the way) tells us to do.

I hope you can see the message clearly ^_^.

(I give you a hint as to how it should be read in the first line, I hope you see that as well.)

(if no one can get the imp's message in a day or two Ill point it out myself.  

[NovaKing]

I'm going to make an anthology of poems concerning (and narrated by) this Imp, called: Tales of and by the Imp. I'm gonna write each one I come by during my daily musing in the small note book which contains the cover art, and the picture of the imp. I'll photocopy it when it's done.  

[KirbyVictorious]

A'ight, Nova. Harsh criticism.

It was good, it really was, but confusing. Can you maybe not scramble the letters? I couldn't tell what they said for a really long time, and I never got the first one.

And when you start rhyming, it always seems childish to me, no matter how I look at it. I think it's the scheme--Iambic tetrameter always sounded singsongy to me. You should experiment with different meters adn rhyme schemes, Nova--I think you'd be really good!

All in all, I liked it. It would be difficult to make an entire poem out of something as simple as procrastination, let alone one with that tone and mood. I never thought of it that way before.

wink  

[NovaKing]

KirbyVictorious

A'ight, Nova. Harsh criticism.

It was good, it really was, but confusing. Can you maybe not scramble the letters? I couldn't tell what they said for a really long time, and I never got the first one.

And when you start rhyming, it always seems childish to me, no matter how I look at it. I think it's the scheme--Iambic tetrameter always sounded singsongy to me. You should experiment with different meters adn rhyme schemes, Nova--I think you'd be really good!

All in all, I liked it. It would be difficult to make an entire poem out of something as simple as procrastination, let alone one with that tone and mood. I never thought of it that way before.

wink

I am not incapable of switching to different rhyme schemes, I simple prefer the childish, and indeed sing-songy, style more. Chidlren, you should know, are more morally intelligent than adults, and I often find their tone prefferable when it comes to didactic rhymes.

[I do what I think is best for my message, no more or less.]


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by the way, The original syntax made it much easier to see the words (I made it so that the words were written diagonally and with all their letters in order) but gaia sucks, and wouldnt let me keep my spaces crying so I had to compensate by using brackets to signify the beginning and end of each word.  

[NovaKing]

oh and

PS

100 Nova points if you can tell me what the final lines to the poem were.  

[KirbyVictorious]

Well, I can understand that. I just don't remember you using anything different. Maybe it's just me.

ALso, I don't think this goes here. Isn't it a poem?

I dunno. :/ what were they?  

[NovaKing]

KirbyVictorious

Well, I can understand that. I just don't remember you using anything different. Maybe it's just me.

ALso, I don't think this goes here. Isn't it a poem?

I dunno. :/ what were they?

no no


its curiously structured prose that happens to ryhme in the end.

what I write here I call poetry

for it looks so wonderful ^_^  

[NovaKing]

KirbyVictorious

Well, I can understand that. I just don't remember you using anything different. Maybe it's just me.

ALso, I don't think this goes here. Isn't it a poem?

I dunno. :/ what were they?

If the next poster can't get it I'll tell you. EE Cummings and I are tricky poets, who love (and loved) to dable with the human perception of things.  

[NovaKing]

maybe that will help.  

[KirbyVictorious]

*confused*  

[NovaKing]

KirbyVictorious

*confused*

I moved a part that you weren't supposed to read till the end.  

[Flowers For Demon Horns]

If you want to keep the text structure with the diagonally, you could take a screen shot and past it.
just and idea.
I love the poem, I could just see an imp sitting there wagging his finger.  

[NovaKing]

Flowers For Demon Horns

If you want to keep the text structure with the diagonally, you could take a screen shot and past it.
just and idea.
I love the poem, I could just see an imp sitting there wagging his finger.

It's not too important. If you can see one word you can see them all.  

[Oukow]

After reading it twice I saw more words, but one part still gets me confused *rereads*

I like this, and the fact that it's an imp telling the story makes it sound more interesting.

I hope to see more, this gave me a little wake up call to use my brain. ^-^