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QueenElizabeth3
Crew

PostPosted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 4:54 pm
Ok, so Panda gave me an idea.
In the Introduce Yourself post, she had us write the first five things that pop into our heads, yes?
I think it would be fun to make that into a game.

Think of five random things.
Write a -literate- poem that includes all of those five things.
It has to make a little sense, though..

Fun, right?
 
PostPosted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 9:20 pm
snow, deer, beer, rummy, lovely
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um... i don't know if i can make a -literate- poem about these things. o: i'll try later, for now i have to go. c;
 

PandaEnlightenment
Captain


JamesRaith

PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 10:06 am
So, I cheated. Instead of using my own words, I stole Panda's.


================
We saw deer tracks,
Freshly pressed into snow
Like the kisses you pressed
Into my skin.
The air, crisp, kissed
You and me
And the deer--
Wherever they hid.

The beer, amber
In the light
Through the open tent flap
Warmed our veins,
And we warmed our veins
In each other's skin
With kisses pressed
Like tracks into snow.

You rose out of the sleeping bag,
A swan burst from the lake's mirror,
And your skin, warmed to the veins
With snow and my kisses.
And you asked if we could play rummy.
“That,” I said, “would be lovely,”
With you.
===================

Not my best, but I like it. In continuing the theme, and maybe modifying the rules of the contest, I provide 5 words for some other intrepid soul to attempt to make a poem out of.

The words: god, coffee, bent, letter, poor  
PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 10:41 am
I'll try your words. :] Although I'm not really Christian... ><

A teary letter to the poor
is complicated, nothing more
than a piece of paper, coffee stains
that mark the places God remains
to bring a peace of mind and heart
to wind two paths that bent apart,
so when the hourglass runs dry
Godspeed this letter surely flies.

What do you guys think? o:

Whoever goes next doesn't have to use these, but I'll just give the option. c;

jealousy, hope, fax, pilot, paper.


 

PandaEnlightenment
Captain


Rad Disease
Vice Captain

PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 10:47 am
Jealsously the pilot hopes,
his face a paper mask
as he flies from one end
to the other

He thinks of his wife
and her beauty
but in his mind
he can't stay with her
he has to fly


Well thats the first piece I've ever written. XDDDDD
rawr monkeys mountain dew face  
PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:16 am
what about fax? xD
 

PandaEnlightenment
Captain


QueenElizabeth3
Crew

PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:32 am
See? Isn't this fun? Everyone is doing a really good job, I'm very impressed!

And James. If you don't publish your poetry...I will be very mad at you, and Hammi's packman will have to eat you. You're amazing!
 
PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:36 am
QueenElizabeth3
See? Isn't this fun? Everyone is doing a really good job, I'm very impressed!

And James. If you don't publish your poetry...I will be very mad at you, and Hammi's packman will have to eat you. You're amazing!


Haha. Careful. My ego bites if stroked too much.

Really, though, poetry isn't my thing. I'm good at it, I guess, but I don't care if it ever gets published.  

JamesRaith


QueenElizabeth3
Crew

PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:43 am
JamesRaith
QueenElizabeth3
See? Isn't this fun? Everyone is doing a really good job, I'm very impressed!

And James. If you don't publish your poetry...I will be very mad at you, and Hammi's packman will have to eat you. You're amazing!


Haha. Careful. My ego bites if stroked too much.

Really, though, poetry isn't my thing. I'm good at it, I guess, but I don't care if it ever gets published.


Foolish little writer....
such silly stories you tell yourself.
I care if they get published!
I want to read more of them!
 
PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:46 am
It is very fun! n___n
Why don't you try, queenie? c:
 

PandaEnlightenment
Captain


QueenElizabeth3
Crew

PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:53 am
grrrr. i keep doing that! editing other peoples posts by accident!!

Sorry!


I will for sure! But I have to leave in just a moment though I'm not sure when/how much longer I'll be online. I'd rather try when I've got all the time in the world! ^^
 
PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:56 am
Don't worry. I edited it out. xDD
 

PandaEnlightenment
Captain


Rad Disease
Vice Captain

PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 6:51 pm
Eh, poems aren't my thing. I'm better with stories. @.@  
PostPosted: Sat Jul 05, 2008 11:25 am
xD I see. I think I'll make a subforum for contests, peer edits, and prompts. c:
 

PandaEnlightenment
Captain


Rad Disease
Vice Captain

PostPosted: Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:01 pm
Ok. o:  
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something peaceful.

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