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secretvoiceswithinthesoul
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 Posted: Tue Sep 02, 2008 11:48 am
This is just something I dreamed up one day and I was wonder if its any good. Plz give feed back. Even bad feed bad is good.
My first memory is of the snow…. White and clean. It seemed to make the world look new. That was untill it was stained with blood.
I was six years old when my life became the propriety of others. It was snowing that day my father killed my mother has she tried to stop him from selling me into slavery. Some time I can still hear her screams and see the knife sticking out of her chest. I was sold off and trained to be a body guard. During my training I had to kill a lot of people my own age. I still sometimes hear their screams in my nightmares….. By the age of fifth teen I was bought has a body guard for a rich land barons daughter. She was my age. Her name was Maya. She was about 5ft 7 in’ with black hair has smooth has silk. She had the most beautiful green eyes. She was very kind to me. Shortly after becoming her body guard we fell in love. By the age for 18 she set me free and we ran away together, but it was not to last. Her farther enraged that his daughter could love a slave sent men after us. They tried to kill me but in the process hurt her badly her. I made them pay, I ripped them all apart. Soon after that she died.
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Posted: Fri Sep 05, 2008 12:57 pm
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Posted: Fri Sep 05, 2008 12:59 pm
its awesome it really is but u dreaming ur a boy is weird
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Posted: Sun Jan 04, 2009 3:22 pm
It sounds really good! You could make that a trilogy... or more... It has potential... not something I would read though... I'm more creatures and talking animals wink but anything with a good cover... I'll read! smile
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Posted: Sat Jan 17, 2009 4:28 am
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Posted: Fri Jan 23, 2009 4:23 pm
"My world have end
Well there´s a song about that
Is i was a boy something like that i swear i ear it on the radio sweatdrop
she whisper softy.... my world have end"
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Posted: Tue Apr 14, 2009 10:21 am
i love it! even though im into romantic realistic fiction..... i would still read it. it sounds InTeReStInG... biggrin
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Posted: Wed Apr 15, 2009 6:36 pm
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Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 3:34 pm
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Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 6:05 pm
i like it you have good dreams if it was that good
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Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 7:14 pm
i would read it its so romantic i love romantic books heart i would read it 50 times cause my motto is "never judge a book by its cover" if u read a little of the book and its good then u will charish it forever heart *sigh my life sucks* emo
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