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	Old crap too lazy to edit out all Taylor Legendary Warrior member is offline Strength can be hidden. Gender: Posts: 1073 Re: Kuro-Rene ? Reply #31 on: Jun 21st, 2004, 12:53am ? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Hehe, Dp how do you think I feel wit Rene dead? I'm happy you did some! I didn't think you were gonna write some by today!! I'm so sorry!!!!!!!! I didn't intend to make you feel so sad by telling you to not play so much rag!! Come on! We can still all do Ria like Mer and I are slowly. Aww don't feel bad. And what you talkin bout?! I like to rp with you!! This fan fic was real good! Logged -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Do you want me to kill you? Or what? KuraiGekkou General member is online ~* Song mood~ Move your feet! Gender: Posts: 814 Re: Kuro-Rene ? Reply #32 on: Jun 21st, 2004, 5:05pm ? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- thanks guys. After reading over mai story and then DPs. I relize i completely suck compare to DPs. So i just finished modifieng the story to make it sound a lil better. i just relized the multiple spelling and grammer errors. and i conclude that listning to RO music and writing stories dont mix along too well. And also i need to proofread ;; Logged -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- DDR EXTREME BOOYA! GOT IT! happiness... the moral of the music video? chipmunks are evil. http://fyia.proboards22.com/index.cgi?boar...&num=1061730786 "This Train aint a stopin for nobody!"-Barret FF7 Taylor Legendary Warrior member is offline Strength can be hidden. Gender: Posts: 1073 Re: Kuro-Rene ? Reply #33 on: Jun 21st, 2004, 6:31pm ? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I'll read it again later. I'm eatin Tunafish! I like your avatar! That pic of me needs to be shot... Logged -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Do you want me to kill you? Or what? RayanStiger General member is offline GIVE ME MY PRESCRIPTION CHICKS!!! Gender: Posts: 1635 Re: Kuro-Rene ? Reply #34 on: Jun 21st, 2004, 10:17pm ? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Well...the reason mine is better is just because I'm going to be a writer! That is my calling! Besides, it's about the ONLY thing I can do, besides eat, play video games, and sword fight...where as I'm sure you can do lots of things. But yes, I spend much time on mine spellchecking, editing, etc. I only put it up when i feel that it can't really be improved upon at my current writing skill level, or if I really just have no more inspiration regarding a section of a story I've written. Then I just say, "Bah, who cares...all my other stuff is good, this'll just be one black sheep out of a hundred..." Actually, I'd think RO music would be quite GOOD to listen to as you write...I listen to lyricless music (video game music in my case). It helps a lot. But music with lyrics is usually distracting... that's why it helps to be a nerd like me so you only listen to nerdy vg music! Anyways keep it up! And believe me, you don't know how long it takes me to write up things with the quality I put into them...an hour minimum... Logged -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "Sorry, Mr. DP, but you're crazy enough already as it is." "WHAT?! NO CHICKS?!" "We suggest you take a substitute prescription drug known as 'cyanide.' It's very effective at curing people such as yourself." Aldora LadyDarkness member is offline Where there is Light, there is Darkness. Darkness and Light are the two halves of one. Gender: Posts: 90 Re: Kuro-Rene ? Reply #35 on: Jun 22nd, 2004, 4:55pm ? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I must say you have improved it. re-reads* Hm, my character's being tortured. Oh well, still like it nehehe. Logged -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ~~ Aldora of Nell ~~ Lady Darkness ~~ Kari ~~ Lady Light Taylor Legendary Warrior member is offline Strength can be hidden. Gender: Posts: 1073 Re: Kuro-Rene ? Reply #36 on: Jun 26th, 2004, 03:27am ? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- What's going to happen?! Logged -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Do you want me to kill you? Or what? KuraiGekkou General member is online ~* Song mood~ Move your feet! Gender: Posts: 814 Re: Kuro-Rene ? Reply #37 on: Aug 7th, 2004, 04:06am ? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I would love to post up mai next 2/ parts of Kuro Rene but unfourtantly... i dunt see anyway i could plug mai thumb drive into this computer. No USB ports newhere. which makes me mucho sad cause i really enjoyed writing out this part T.T Logged -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- DDR EXTREME BOOYA! GOT IT! happiness... the moral of the music video? chipmunks are evil. http://fyia.proboards22.com/index.cgi?boar...&num=1061730786 "This Train aint a stopin for nobody!"-Barret FF7 part 4 KuraiGekkou General member is online ~ Song mood~ Move your feet! Gender: Posts: 814 Re: Kuro-Rene ? Reply #38 on: Aug 27th, 2004, 3:45pm ? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Kuro Rene Part 4* KuraiGekkou Well finally I have found some time to write more of Kuro Rene. Here I am sitting in the middle of china with nothing better to do. Well I hope your happy with this, even though this may not get posted till the time I get back into the US due to the lack of internet connection from this laptop. Now. About the story development so far, I believe I have dug myself too deep into a weird plot, which wasn't really planned into it. So now what am I going to do? I think I'm going to have to just wing the rest of the story into something made up and stuff. Sooo where was I? return note Hey guys! im back from china! turns out i had to wait till i got back. Neways this is the unrevised version of the story so it may be sloopy and a bit messy. SO if youwant to change anything you can actaully tell me and i may change it just for the hell of it. ^^ Enjoy! ed Kurai stared down straight at the metallic shell that contained Rene's soul. "so you programmed her with all mai movements calculated in her huh?" Kurai sounded cool even to the fact this was most likely going to be his death machine. "huu!" He let out a puff of angry air. "How badly do you want to kill me Jake?" Jake smiled. "Quite badly Kurai. I mean. About 10 years you let Rene die in that building collapse hadn't you? So wouldn't it make sense that I would wish for you to die?" Kurai scratched his chin making himself look like in deep thought. "Wait... your saying your accusing me of killing Rene?" He threw his arms widely in midair. (cause he sort of is floating in mid air also neways.) "Mint was about to get killed under collapse too! I'm sorry to say this but I had to put her over Rene's life! She's my only daughter isn't she?" Jake frowned. "Mint already died once. I don't think Mint deserves the privilege of her existence in the real world. She lost her chance in the Real world already once so she screwed up. Rene had a chance to continue living, and you had that choice to save her life. So you took away her life instead!" He slammed the metallic table near his control panel. Kurai sputtered angrily. "Dude! How often do you get a chance to have your only daughter reincarnated from the spirit world?" Kurai asked glaring at Jake. Jake only stared back at him. "That's right. Not very often kid. So I wouldn't dare to loose her again." Jake glared back at Kurai. Apparently both men were very stubborn on their point of view. "We will see who's love is stronger I guess." Jake then waved his hands and Kuro-Rene shot into the sky firing a blue flame from her feet. A wave of air washed over all who observed the fight. A few papers flew widely in the air and Toadess's hair waved widely. Kurai couldn't react to such fast movements, Rene's fist flew straight into Kurai's face slamming him off balance from his aerial stance. His wings erected and twitched from the pain received and then quickly flapped himself about until he was upright. Kurai then forced himself to rocket towards Rene attempting to return the blow plus his own little anger. With a wild battle cry he swung his fist quickly towards Kuro-Rene. Kuro-Rene still with her emotionless face and listless eyes grabbed his fist right before contact against her skin. Kurai froze for a moment. Kuro-Rene's body then glowed white, her skin seemed to have light up and a haunting low humming sound produced from her body. Suddenly electricity crackled on the shoulder of the arm which held Kurai's fist. It tunneled through and around her arm till it reached Kurai's fist. Kurai screamed as the electricity burned his whole body eternally. His wings shot back and his body twisted inhumanly. Kurai struggled out of Rene's grip, but the electricity current with Rene made a dead grip with him. Aoshi stared at the lighted up Kurai with pain, "Dang it..." Aoshi muttered. Rayan then yelled out to Aoshi, "Let me take over Aoshi! Ill blast that false Rene right out of the sky!" Aoshi didn't let Rayan take over. "Rayan I can handle this on mai own!" And with that he threw his sword like a dart straight towards Rene. The sword caught Rene off guard and pierced straight into Rene's back. The electricity ran straight towards the sword and overcharged Rene's energy into a threatening bolt which hit Rene in the back. Rene quickly let go of Kurai's hand and she arched backwards in pain. Although her body showed she was in pain her face didn't show any emotion. Kurai stumbled about in the sky holding his head as he focused on Rene. Rene now was pulling the sword out of her back and then tossing it off to the side. Jake stared at Aoshi annoyed. "You stay out of this or else ill kill your wife faster then you can say Punished Angel." Aoshi ignored the warning and grabbed his sword as it fell towards the ground and leaped into the sky. He thrusted his sword in front of his face and went into a stance that made him look likes a dart himself. His jacket flew about him gracefully as if it was a part of him or like wings. He then yelled as he thrusted his sword quickly towards Rene. Jake seeing this commanded Rene to quickly change targets to Aoshi. Rene turned somersaulted in the air bringing her heel down at a frightening speed into Aoshi's Face. Aoshi quickly dodged it with much surprise. Rene crouching down from the movement of her heel slam quickly jolted upwards towards the retreating Aoshi holding her hand and shoving her elbow into Aoshi's opened chest. Aoshi Screamed in pain as he was directly blown into the chest. Kurai seeing an opportunity to attack Rene fired out a dark flame towards Rene's unprotected back. It hit her but didn't burn her at all, all it did was throw her forward a bit. Kurai slapped his head. "UGG! I'm such a baka!" He said in realization of an important rule of the Devils flame. Jake laughed. "Yes you are Kurai you already forgotten your flame can only burn those who have living flesh. That mistake is going to cost you dearly." Jake then tossed his hand in the air commanding Rene to attack Kurai. Rene flung herself forward towards Kurai. Kurai not having time to retreat threw a fist at Rene defensively. Before Kurai could even throw it downwards at Rene had already reached Kurai and grabbed both of his arms continuing propelling forward through the air now with Kurai with her. Kurai only having his legs tried to kick her while they flew forward towards a wall showing no signs of stopping. This proved difficult to do in their aerial state. Kurai smirked at Rene angrily. "So your going to slam me into that wall we about to run into huh? Heh. Bring it ON!!!" Kurai yelled. And then crash, Kurai was dashed into the wall. A huge dust cloud kicked up and a low shaking whump filled the air. Debris fell about and Kurai and Rene was nowhere to be seen. Mint worriedly held Toadess who was looking continuously at the battle. Aoshi who just finished recovering from his pained Rib which was just knocked about again yelled to Kurai hoping for an answer. Kari held Riku who was resting and prayed for both fathers to be ok. The dust cleared and Kurai was shown pinned against a crater in the wall by Rene. Kurai was forcefully and painfully closing one eye staring straight at the emotionless face of Rene. Rene started to glow white again and the low haunting humming noise resumed. Kurai smirked painfully. "Rene... your still in there aren't you?" Rene just stared straight at Kurai. "Come on Rene. You got to remember me. Kurai remember?" He coughed out some dust. Rene showed no sign of stopping as electricity started to jump about Rene. "I missed you probably just as much as Jake Rene. Heh, but I wasn't looking forward our reunion to have consist of a fight to survival." Rene then formed a ball of electricity at her shoulders ready to jolt straight into Kurai. "I may not know about Souls Rene but one thing I know they never forget anything. Never forgetting about people they care about. That's what makes everyone's soul unique ya know?" Kurai chuckled and stared at the balls of electricity. Aoshi started to fly towards Rene. Rene then released the electricity straight towards Kurai. Kurai yelled in pain but then stopped it and forced his eye open towards Rene. "Damn you know how much this hurts Rene?" Kurai asked through clenched teeth. "It hurts me right here...." Kurai slowly moved his hand towards his heart. "It hurts may heart that ya don't remember me Rene. And that's probably worse then this lightning..." Rene's head started to bob a bit. Showing some sort of unrobotic behavior. Aoshi seeing this stopped in his flight and looked amazed. Jake shook his head in disbelieve. "huh?" He asks out loud. Kurai then leaned forward towards Rene. "yeah, so ya know I probably shouldn't do this with Toadess looking and all but what the hell." Kurai then Grunted and threw his arms forward throwing Rene backwards. Rene stumbled through the air but then stopped as she charged a plasma blast in her hand. But right before she could Kurai rushed towards Rene and embraced her. "this ain't a hug Rene. This is just resisting your movements from attacking me ok?" Rene didn't move at all, but instead her eyes turned from the empty pool of green into lifelike green eyes. She let out a normal human gasp. "Jake?" She answered instantly. But then once she felt the different hair texture she frightingly pulled away from Kurai holding her chest as if violated. Kurai disgustingly looked at Jake. ? Last Edit: Aug 27th, 2004, 3:50pm by KuraiGekkou ? Logged -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- DDR EXTREME BOOYA! GOT IT! happiness... the moral of the music video? chipmunks are evil. http://fyia.proboards22.com/index.cgi?boar...&num=1061730786 "This Train aint a stopin for nobody!"-Barret FF7 KuraiGekkou General member is online ~* Song mood*~ Move your feet! Gender: Posts: 814 Re: Kuro-Rene ? Reply #39 on: Aug 27th, 2004, 3:46pm ? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "Damn... for a while I thought it was some true goodness crap was true and I was reaching Rene's soul. Turns out Jake just programmed her to react to the emotion of love to switch away from her robotic mode. Disgusting..." Jake blushed in embarrassment. But then quickly and angrily called to Rene. "Rene! Go attack them now!" Rene Hesitantly looked towards Kurai and once she did she flinched and held herself tighter. "J??Jake... I don't think I can..." Kurai looked at Rene and laughed. "That's right, you have to activate her manually into Robotic mode. For now she is just the Rene we know. Except for the tampering on the soul you did Jake..." He glared at Jake. Aoshi smiled as he remembered how Jake had to flick some sort of switch behind Rene's neck. "so for now Jake..." He grabbed Rene's arm and pulled her towards him. "I'm going to take her on a date ok?" He winked at Jake and Rene blushed holding her face in confusion of fright and embarrassment. Kurai seeing Rene blushed whistled in amazement. "Wow, you really did a number on her emotion on love haven't ya?" he then slapped his head. "Oh nahh. I forgot. I'm a highly attractive bishie aren't I?" He laughed. Aoshi sweat dropped on how Kurai was taking this situation quite childishly. Kurai then waved to Jake, "Ja Ne!" And he flew away picking up Toadess and Mint as he zipped straight out of the door. Jake quickly not really wanting his life work to be wasted away by a half devil human quickly put on a strange mechanical device and rocketed towards Kurai. Aoshi flew straight down in front of Jake. Jake quickly stopped. "Out of mai way Satan's son, I am not letting Kurai take mai Rene." His contraption he wore released a large plasma cannon aiming straight towards Aoshi. Aoshi chuckled slowly as he sees the cannon. "I'm sorry Jake. But for now Rene can't be bai your side for now. And with that Aoshi tilted his sword into the direction to reflect the sunlight. Then suddenly he threw the sword in the air Jake fired at it thinking Aoshi was jumping in the air to attack him. It hit nothing but the air around the sword. Jake quickly turned back to face the Aoshi who stood their. Instead he saw Rayan. "Hey!" He smiled and tossed something about his hand. Jake growled impatiently and fired away towards Rayan's direction. Rayan gracefully flipped backwards his long jacket flapping about him. He then tossed the something in his hand towards the ground. It emitted an enormous light which filled the whole room. Jake yelled angrily. "A flash bang! Damnit!" he covered his face shielding his face from the piercing light. Jake touched something around his ear and a strange type of glasses flipped about to cover his eyes. It allowed him to see through the bright light but only the heat from people's bodies. (duh Heat sensor crap.) Seeing Rayan nowhere he let out an angry roar and dash towards his huge metallic control panel stuff and slam down on a few buttons. Kurai flew quickly and skiffully through the messy ruins of the abandoned lab. He carried along with him his family and a guest. Rene didn't say a thing ever since Kurai kidnapped her she just sort of stared at each person only opening her mouth but never saying anything. This made Kurai worried and constantly looking at her. "Damn Rene. This is diffently not you right here." He said staring straight at Rene's face which didn't return a look. Mint Quickly tapped his father's head quite rough. "DAD! Keep your eyes on the road!" Kurai blushed embarrassingly as he quickly returned his face towards the road. Toadess stared at Rene too worryingly. "Yeah. By now Rene darling you would have started blabbing off about some shopping and clothing..." she said softly to her. "Or embarrassing yourself" Kurai muttered under his breath. Mint whapped her fathers head again. "BE nice!" Kurai flinched under the blow of her daughters palm and then groaned. "I wonder how Aoshi is though..." Toadess said looking up at Kurai. Kurai rolled his eyes. "Aoshi and Rayan will be just fine. They got the freaking Priestess who has god on her side and they have the former son of Satan and along with that the offspring of both of them against a simple man who has some serious problem with his life. What harm could come to them?" Suddenly the whole place started to shake underneath them all. Kurai Curiously studied the ground. "What the devil...?" Kurai asked particularly no one. Suddenly the ground parted away in 2 directions as if mosses were separating the sea Desert style. Kurai froze to stare at the strange action of the ground. "uhhh..." Kurai stared dumbfounded at it. Toadess and Mint looked towards the ground to a bit worryingly. Mint started to scream. "EEK! Daddy! Move away from there! I don't want to fall into that pit!" she started to kick about. Kurai groaned and obediently followed her daughter's whim. "I'm going to fall in the hole. Daddy isn't strong enough to carry me. NIENIENIE..." Kurai said mockingly as he slowly floated away from the pit which started to grow larger as the two parts of lands continued to part. Kurai just continued to stare at it in the pure reason of curiosity. Suddenly a blast of air was heard from behind Kurai. Kurai quickly turned to see what produced the sound. There he saw Aoshi with his two pairs of devil wings spread out flying at a massively high speed which required a blast of Ki energy. Behind him was Kari with her own pair of angelic wings holding their offspring. "KURAI YOU BAKA!" Aoshi yelled out towards the standing Kurai. "GET THE HELL OUT OF HERE!" Aoshi zipped past Kurai showing no signs of stopping. Kurai just stood there wondering. "Why the hell should I get the hell out of here?" He wondered out loud. Kari then zipped past Kurai without a word. Recently Kari has grown much more traditional wife like and let her husband do most of the talking while she remains silent as if all she needed to say would come out of her husband. Kurai then turned down towards the pit again. The 2 grounds stopped moving. Suddenly a massive chorus of low humming sounds started to roar about towards the sky. As if a bunch of worshippers. Billions of small red dots started to glow in the dark deep pit. Kurai suddenly started to understand. "Ohhhhhhh Army of Robots. AHH yes... right..." Kurai started to chuckle. Sighed. A slow moment of silence. "HOLY CRAP." He yelled and then jetted out almost dropping Her family and the constantly silent Rene. Suddenly a shower of bullets shoots towards Kurai. Flying upwards trying to get out of range he struggles to stay afloat along with the added weight of the passengers. "damn damn damn." Kurai said in a sort of sing along rhythm. In aerial ballet he somehow managed to dodge the hail of bullets that flew upwards from the pit. The hail of bullets didn't stop in one wave. They continuously fired at Kurai till they could be satisfied and see him shot down. Time from time Kurai was hit bai a few as he tried to protect his family by flying in an awkward upside down position. "ok... time to jet." Kurai whispered to particular no one. Kurai concentrated on using a wave of energy to propel him forward away from the shower. But was interrupted bai a sudden blast piercing critically into his back. Kurai jolted upwards and then lost balance and dizzyingly fell downwards. This left everyone vurnable. Mint screamed and Toadess braced herself. Rene covered her face in fear. The wave of bullets continued to follow Kurai's downwards spiral but couldn't hit him due to his unsteady and unpredictable movements. However Rene was hit right in the arm. "Oh!" Rene said in a surprised voice as if she was hurt for the first time in her life. She stared at her ripped skin revealing her robotic shell underneath. Kurai snapped back and then released his already stored energy to propel him quickly away. A wave of air blasted dust behind him away towards the robots in the pit. A few of them were kicked up bai the sudden blast of air and smashed against the ground. Logged -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- DDR EXTREME BOOYA! GOT IT! happiness... the moral of the music video? chipmunks are evil. http://fyia.proboards22.com/index.cgi?boar...&num=1061730786 "This Train aint a stopin for nobody!"-Barret FF7 Author notes Well what can i say about Chapter 4? it was Bsed.. all over China in a laptop XP. hehe i was rather dissapointed but when i reread it. the fight scene.. it wasnt so bad ^^;;

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	Hmm scratches head I don't remember reading that last part. Anyways, -.- I really never thought of Kari getting married. Poor Riku, he doesn't act anything like Kari 0.o. You should put the Lil Ria Bag thing here. The one with Crissy and the other kids. Speaking of Crissy... returns from rummaging Where's the pic I drew of her last year! Wait... was it last year or the year before... hmm -.- Must be last year cuz I used the sea foam green color on her. She's in one of my notebooks? Ahh! Crissy come back! Crissy or Chrissy O.o

Posted: Tue Jan 18, 2005 11:42 am


	Aili's got brown hair eek Must be Kari now O.o? Or uh that new girl, I can't remember her name sorry. sweatdrop YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAYYYYYYYYY KURO RENE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW WHHHHHHHHHHHEEEEEE EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE EEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart biggrin

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	I love the two most recent chapters. I think the transition you made to first person was brilliant- doing the first half in 3rd person, then the second half in 1st. Though I think it would also be good to switch back to 3rd person again once you're ready for the big finisher to the story. Sort of like sandwich that 1st person between the usual 3rd person style. Comments. Kurai's section was sorta cool and odd at the same time. Had Rachel's characters show back up, which was good. I mostly skimmed through this section, since I should be back studying for exams again... XP Rayan's section was marvelous. You really dug into his mind and showed how he thought. With exception to "I wouldn't run after my loved ones, would I?" I think you got his character down well enough. Nothing else contradictory to it, at least. And the interaction with Kari was adorable, and very much in character. The "talking inside the mind" thing with Aoshi was also cool. Then we got to see things from Kari's perspective, about Rene, but moreso about Rayan and Aoshi. Sorta makes you wonder what it's like for her to be married to two different guys at once and put up with them, on top of her inner feelings. And then Riku. Riku is just plain awesome. You did a good job showing his perspective, and how he feels he can't measure up to Aoshi's or Kari's power to protect Mint. I found it strange that he was afraid of her eyes, though. I mean, he's paranoid over them. Anyways, good job. I thinks you should do Mint's perspective next, but you have to find a way to get the story moving again at the same time. Like her and Riku reuniting with Kurai and Rene and such, and then continuing on from there. In conclusion...marvelous. I'm inspired to write our other fanfic again. I wish I didn't have exams, else I'd start right now.

Posted: Mon Jan 31, 2005 10:33 am


	Chapter/Part 7 (whatever you wanna call it...) "Riku..." Mint uttered a small questioning voice to him. Riku slowly glanced down at Mint who was now resting on his shoulder. "Wha--?" He said lazily lifting one of his eyes open. Both of them sat against a tree resting about, seemingly tired on their quest to find Kurai and Rene. "nothing.." Mint said smiling to herself then snuggling back into Riku's shoulder. Riku let out a sigh and then looked up at the sunlight that drenched between the leaves. He knew Mint was just worried about him constantly, and it sort of annoys him. As if he wasnt the dominant one between the two of them. "makes me feel like a child..." he whispered to himself. Mint giggled. "yes just resting like this with no worries does make you feel like a child dosen't it?" She looked back at him with a smile. Riku sighed. "yeah.. whatever. i guess it does.." He then rolled his eyes and turned back to shutting his eyes and just letting the warm day take over them into a mid-afternoon slumber. (wow didn't this mess up the time day.. lets think about this.. we just finished Kurai's Dinner with Rene... and didn't Kurai take Rene to Yin? instead? so wouldn't that be in the evening? then we had The couple Rayan/Aoshi and Kari go to the temple... lets just say that was another day. and then 2nd day after the dinner was when Mint and Riku went off to find Kurai and Toadess to come stumbling along into the temple later. There. that makes sense XP continuing on XD!) Riku heard a sudden jerking sound from behind him like a soft purr. But he relized something was wrong with it seeming they were in a nature setting. Quickly he whiped opened his eyes and grabbed Mint and leaped away from the tree they were at. Surely enough the tree suddenly splitted in half smacking splinters and sawdust around them. Riku tumbled with a frightened Mint across the grassy ground until he rolled into a kneeling stance facing back at what the tree now was just a jagged splintery stump. "damn it.." Riku let out of his mouth. Surely enough there was the owner of a robotic arm smiling back at them from behind the stump they once rested against. "Jake..." Riku muttered out. Jake slowly extended his arm back twoards his body giving a slight bow to Riku and Mint. "Is your arm feeling better young spawn of the devil and the angel?" Jake said mockingly. Riku just gritted his teeth and reached for the his special blue Stiger gun he always kept in his jacket. Jake was well aware of it and slowly lifted his head back up. "Go ahead and try to shoot me Riku.. that will only leave Mint unguarded long enough for me to kill her.." He smiled showing a quick jerk of his hand movement. It was too fast for any human to see. Just a quick metallic blur. Jakes long white labcoat whipped about as he slowly started to walk twoards Riku and Mint. Mint was still frightened from the sudden mood change and had just clenched onto Riku for safety. Riku slowly pulled out his gun each step Jake took twoards both of them. "Theres no way.. not even a machine could assasinate in less then a split second..." Riku thought to himself. "He's just trying to place my guard down thats all.." and with that Riku quickly twirled upwards throwing his arm upwards and placing his gun straight aiming twoards Jake's forehead. Jake gave a slow smirk as he saw the gun aiming straight at him. "Go ahead.. shoot." he said with a calm smile. Riku didn't hesitate he gave out a warcry and shot 3 times straight at Jake's forehead. The gun gave out its loud cry and the force of the gunshot forced Riku's hand back as he quickly placed it straight aiming for Jake's head again. Jake's right arm went up in a blur and all was seen was 3 bright yellow sparks. Jake's arm then reappeared back at his side the same smile was still on Jake's face. "what happened Riku? did you think you actually shot me?" He said laughing. Riku slowly let out a breath of air and then shock filled his eyes. "what..." He muttered softly and the gun started to shakein his head. "... " he had no words for this momment of fear. Jake slowly rotated his own neck cracking it in varoius spots. "hmm although i did belive something hit me.." He said smiling. "Your have quite remarkable gunsmanship Riku.. i take it is being a hobby for you are the son of a man who makes guns.. am i not correct?" he said slowly placing his hand on his lips thinking thoughtfully." Riku annoyed by his mocking he tossed his gun quickly twoards him and then pulled out two larger guns in his coat pockets. Jake quickly and swiftly turned his hand into a quick metallic blur and slapped away the gun thrown at him. The two guns Riku now held were meant for two hands and are much larger in size. Quickly Riku fired them both off. He fired 2 for each guns before almost falling backwards from the force. Jake seeing the powerful bullets heading his way quickly threw up both of his arms and then turning them into that strange quick metallic blur movement. all was seen was two Large yellow sparks forming and then quickly dissepearing. the other two just missed him completetly. "Riku... your facing the highest underground technology here... Technology that was never meant for the humans to see cause it was too dangerous. Manipulation of the human body.... The powerful human brain within a equally powerful body.. its remarkably powerful... and purely unstoppable..." Jake said staring down at the palm of his hands. four strange blade like things then emerged from his back and spread out like wings. "come now Riku... i want to see what a human body is only limited to. Become my first experiment with this machine.." He taunted to Riku and fingered him to come up to fight him." "s**t.." Riku muttered and then thought what his mother would do. he was taught to not let anger come to him and allow him to continue to focus. cause mistakes are easily made when one does not gain focus. His father Rayan seemed to agree with the mother very well on this too. Seeing that gunsmanship requires a lot of focus. Riku carfully thought to himself what weapon he could use to try to throw Jake down with but it seemed Jake could counter any attack that would be thrown at him. "Riku! let me take him on!" Mint yelled at Riku and then leaped up into a battle stance. She glared down at Jake and jake stared at Mint with much amusment. "hmm? whats this!?" Jake laughed. "You want to kill me right!? to avenge for Rene's death huh? well then come on you big meanie!!" Mints traits from her mother started to shine there. Riku stared at Mint with disbelivement. "Mint what are you doing!? stop it! your not going to be able to take him on!" he then quickly stood up next to her pulling out a strange gun that was then latched onto his arm. "I should protect you Mint.. and i will try my best doing so..." He then stood in front of her and glared Jake down. Mint a bit touched by Riku's caring blushed a bit and then held her hands twoards her chest. "ahh.. but.." Riku quickly turned back at Mint and smiled. "you don't think im going to loose am i?" He smirked. Jake gave out an annoyed yawn. "You kids... stop stalling the fact i will crush you all into the ground..." He smirked evily and then slapped both of his fist together. It gave off a deafening metallic clang and electricity crackled from between the two fists. "commme on!" He slammed his foot into the ground and the wings on his back shook. Riku slowly turned his head and placed on a serious face. "Alright.. lets do this.." he then slowly crouched down a bit holding the weapon that was latched onto his arm. Then After another twisted smile on Jake's face. Jake let out a frightning battle cry and dashed twoards Riku so fast his legs seemingly didn't even touch the ground. only some dirt was seen kicked up from underneathe his legs. Quickly his body twisted within mid air swinging a foot down with a slight halt before it reached Riku's body. Riku's small body was thrown to the side and into the ground. With a violent slam. Riku let out a painful cry as he rolled about the ground grabbing his side. "Your father Aoshi was hit in that same spot.." Jake said as he landed on both feet and crossing his arms. "i thought it would be sort of special sharing something like that in a father-son relationship.." Riku then quickly rolled up and held his arm cannon out and fired out a strange green energy blast. It filled Riku's and Jake's face with a green glow. It whooshed over to Jake slamming into his body. Jake was thrown a few steps back, each step containing a strong metallic step. Jake looked at his chest and laughed. "was that all you had Riku? your comeback?" He turned his face upwards and laughed heavier. Riku's eyes didn't fill with fear this time instead he just stared straight forward at Jake's pyschotic eyes. Riku squinted one eye shut trying to hold back the pain rushing about his body. "damn..you.." He said softly under his breath. Riku then threw back his arms and then a subtle green light filled into his weapon latched onto his arm. "alright!" RIku yelled out as his arm started to shake and the weapon giving off a increasingly loud humming noise. ((w00t Just like X )) He then threw both arms forward, his left arm grabbing onto the weapon latched onto his right arm. His dangerously overheated weapon let out a mighty blast that expanded from the weapons mouth and kicked up the grass and dirt around it. It threw back Riku's light body violently and made him fall straight onto his back. "hai!" Riku let out a pained gasp as he landed backwards. The plasma blast crashed forward across the grassy ground and then straight twoards Jake's metallic body. Jake's eyes widened as he saw the blast rush forward and then a wild grin filled his face. Quickly he threw up his arms back into a blur and threw it forward smashing his entire arm straight into the large green blast. His arm shook before it could enter the blasts center but Jake forcing it all the way through slammed straight into the green blasts core, grabbing onto the plasma's center. Seemingly the plasma ball stopped and Jake had gotten a hold of it, like tamming a wild monster. Jake's smile stretched across his face as he stared down at the crouching Riku. "hm? you seem frightened now Riku.... what happened to your ever-so eager battle mood?" He said looking down from him. The plasma ball pulsated a steady energy from his palm. Slowly Jake lifted up the ball above his head and smiled down at Riku and then slowly his head twisted to Mint. "hehe.." Riku chuckled as his mettalic body was illuminated from the green plasma blast within his palm. "lets have all the effort you put into making this blast destroy Mint shall we Riku?" Jake smiled slowly twisting his head halfway to see Riky from the corner of his eye. His long blonde hair flipped about his mouth and head seemingly reacting to the strange energy flow of the plasma ball. Riku let out an angry gasp of air between his teeth. "I'll kill you!" He threatened. Jake chuckled and then opened up his palm filling the green plasma balls center with his own dark purple energy. The ball increased with a swirling mixture of purple and green energy. Riku leaped up from his painful crouch and changed his latched on weapon into a metallic fist, then rushed forward twoards Jake throwing his arm forward. "YAHH!!" He let out a loud battle cry before swinging down with fury. Before the fist could contact with Jake a quick blur of Jake's hand once again appeared straight in front of Riku, this time sending Riku to the side after a freash and pure ripping sound was produced. There across Rikus body was a freash rip so perfect as if it was drawn by a pencil. Riku grabbed his chest painfully and sucked air. Jake looked down at Riku and placed a very happy smile on his face. "oops." He said playfully. He then looked down at Mint. "A shame that Kurai won't be able to see his own daughters death..." He then placed his hand on his chin. "but oh yes.. Kurai has already seen his daughter's death once.. oh so he won't have any hard feelings on seeing this one.." he chuckled. "DIE MINT." he said sternly at the frightened Mint. Mint then put on a serious face and leapt up to her feet. "da..." She let out of her mouth having fear controlling her body. Her legs shook and she swallowed violently as she stared straight at Jake. Jake just smiled and threw his arm down releasing the charged plasma blast. The plasma blast let out a roar of electricty which clung to Jake's hand for a while before sepreating into its own destructive wave of energy. Rushing twoards Mint It cleared the grass into just piles of dirt and created a darkly purple and green glow across the grassy field. Mint yelled out frightened as Riku leaped up rushing forward to try to grab Mint away from the balls path. However jake once again released a quick movement of the hand sending Riku far away from Mints reach. "Riku my dear boy.. What exactly are you trying to accomplish?" he chuckled looking down at Riku with his hands on his hips. "Do you wish to rush to your death too?" He chuckled as the plasma ball exploded behind him. A bright light filled the sky and debris flew across Jakes face and his hair whipped into his face. Riku didn't even blink once the bright light stung his eyes he just continued to stare straight forward in disbelief. "nooo Mint.." He said softly. Riku stared straight at Jakes mocking face and clenched his fists angrily. "What did you do!?" he demanded. "Oh.. just erased her off the face of this earth thats all.." he said with a smile and a flick ofhis long blonde hair behind him. Suddenly he found himself in a facefault and he quickly whipped to face behind him. All was seen was smoke shrouded in the place once Mint was. but slowly a shadowy figure was seen through it. There revealed a tall gurl with brown hair drapping down her shoulders. An angry look was on her face as she had her hand extended out in front of her. "Jake.. its not very noble or kind of you to fight young children you know? have you no morale or respect for the ways of battle?" Kari spoke as she slowly let her hand down. Behind her stood Toadess holding onto a Frightened Mint. Jake looked about Kari and chuckled. "Why do you speak that way Kari? is it because you are an 'angel?' or supposingly a beliver of this 'god?' " he looked about her curiously. Kari looked at him strangely. "I have become not fully an angel but a punished one. Also my beliefs with God stand firmly. For he is the one who gives me power in battle." Jake burst out into laughter. "There is no such thing as God Kari... i have proven it." he said pointing to himself. "I am god now. I have made myself even stronger then what this 'god' would have made me into in the begning. You Kari... are no more then just another person's creation perhaps. Just a pawn of somone else." He said looking straight at kari's expression. Kari stared down at him, "How can i be somones creation!? i remembered the time when i was punished by god and i have seen the Angels myself! how can you say a race like that was all created by one person?" she said calmly but apparently very upset with Jake's reply. "Face it Kari. Why do the Angel's and Devil's fight? Why do the Angel's protect the humans and why do the Devil's want to torture the humans? Why are the Devil's consider bad? and why are the Angel's consider good? There is no reason at all! do you find that balanced any way possible?! you guys are just used for Destruction! Because of the battles you wage with the Devil's greed, is it really justice then? Your creators are no more then normal humans finding it entertaining to put you re-programmed humans to act out something for them.." He said slowly walking twoards Kari. Kari facefaulted and let out an angry breath of air before unseathing her sword and aiming it straight twoards jake's face warning him to not take another step. "We are all just part of a game Kari. But i have found the truth. I will become one of them and play this fun game of creating supeior races. Or just simply.. i will be god.." He chuckled as he stared straight into Kari's eyes. "i wonder did The creators purposly chose a gurl like you to become a so called angel.." He said softly to her as he lifted up his arm. Kari quickly sucked in the air angrily and brought her blade down Across Jake's face. Jake seeing this quickly lifted up his other arm and grabed the blade with two fingers stopping it completely. Kari's eyes shot open in fear as she strained to push through Jake's two finger grip. Jake smiled and then leaned closer to Kari. "Kari.. Kari.. Face it.. I am god now. There is no such thing as your 'god' that you belived in..." he smiled.

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Posted: Tue Feb 01, 2005 8:33 pm


	WHOA! THAT LAST PART WAS THE BEST!!!!!!!!!!!! Thankyou for writing more!!!!!!!!! heart

Posted: Tue Feb 01, 2005 10:14 pm


	._. Rene's Short fanfic Intermission before the climaxing chapter of Kuro-Rene KuraiGekkou: we need more spontanous para para dancing HopelessAngel34: ... HopelessAngel34: O.o HopelessAngel34: ::discos:: KuraiGekkou: i havent played DDR for sooo long O-o HopelessAngel34: ... HopelessAngel34: ur not playing it at 1 in the morning -.-; KuraiGekkou: efore the fist could contact with Jake a quick blur of Jake's hand once again appeared straight in front of Riku HopelessAngel34: and? HopelessAngel34: yah KuraiGekkou: yeah KuraiGekkou: thats where i am HopelessAngel34: why am i reading this? KuraiGekkou: :;shrug: HopelessAngel34: -.- HopelessAngel34: GO TO SLEEP! KuraiGekkou: im readddinnggg HopelessAngel34: u are going to be so tired tomarrow! HopelessAngel34: I DUN CARE XP HopelessAngel34: i at least took a long nap! HopelessAngel34: GO TO SLEEP!! KuraiGekkou: Rene should probably die in the story KuraiGekkou: that would make more sense HopelessAngel34: X.X HopelessAngel34: NO! HopelessAngel34: -.- KuraiGekkou: shes dead already KuraiGekkou: maybe Mint should die too then' HopelessAngel34: it would make more sense if i just killed u now KuraiGekkou: ^^;; HopelessAngel34: -.- KuraiGekkou: oo i know how to end this story.. HopelessAngel34: GAH KuraiGekkou: i think. HopelessAngel34: leave me alone i must finish! KuraiGekkou: haejoi;hjweofhq34opg HopelessAngel34: rene never died xp KuraiGekkou: ^^;; HopelessAngel34: it was all a set up HopelessAngel34: cus rene had to go undercover KuraiGekkou: ^^;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;; HopelessAngel34: cus she was matt's apprentence for the holy nights HopelessAngel34: and she had to go to some secret mission KuraiGekkou: ___________________ <- sweatdrop so heavy it crushed alan HopelessAngel34: and along the way HopelessAngel34: she fell in love HopelessAngel34: and then KuraiGekkou: DIED HopelessAngel34: got married KuraiGekkou: because that somone was Jake! HopelessAngel34: had a family HopelessAngel34: and has been living secretly HopelessAngel34: away KuraiGekkou: -.- HopelessAngel34: on earth ^>^ KuraiGekkou: you write your own fanfics lata HopelessAngel34: and also went back in time and figured out her past KuraiGekkou: you finish your work HopelessAngel34: and all the rene's united HopelessAngel34: and then KuraiGekkou: blew up HopelessAngel34: they turned back into me HopelessAngel34: and then HopelessAngel34: they killed alan KuraiGekkou: here you are? KuraiGekkou: -.- HopelessAngel34: and blew up school HopelessAngel34: so KuraiGekkou: But then Alan released the demons inside hiM! HopelessAngel34: there was no more essays KuraiGekkou: AND TURNED INTO A CUTE LOOKING BRIDGET KuraiGekkou: or momiji KuraiGekkou: maybe Bridget HopelessAngel34: but rene didnt care KuraiGekkou: cause he gets a teddy bear. HopelessAngel34: cus there was no essay HopelessAngel34: and she went to bed HopelessAngel34: and slept KuraiGekkou: ^^;; HopelessAngel34: zzzzzzzzzzzz KuraiGekkou: w00t KuraiGekkou: awsome story KuraiGekkou: now i must finish this story HopelessAngel34: yes HopelessAngel34: yes HopelessAngel34: it should get a noble prize

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Posted: Wed Feb 02, 2005 7:15 pm


	No tiiiiiimmme! Will read later. I will. Yes. Yes. OK. ^^

Posted: Fri Feb 11, 2005 9:38 pm


	Gah! Once again, Kari doesn't believe in a god. Oh well, as long as it goes along with your plot. I could write a whole essay on the evolution of Kari through time and fanfics.

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Posted: Wed Feb 16, 2005 7:50 pm


	Well then, why don't u, Aileen? Seeing as we're all confused about your charrys, I mean. Finally Gaia works for me again. Yayyyy...anyways, already made comments to you via IM, but I'll quickly recap here. Shorter paragraphs my friend. Much easier to read, and more concise. Kari shouldn't get angry. You had Riku say himself that she didn't, so why did why when fighting Jake? Danged good fighting. Has that nice drama and junks. Protect that girlfriend! XP Yeah I guess that wraps up what I feel like saying. I said more earlier, but eh, I'm done for now.

Posted: Tue Feb 22, 2005 12:47 pm


	Chapter/Part 8 (Thank you for the comments punks XP Sorry Aili didnt mean to go against your charry but you know.. had to have some religious gurl in this kind of story XP Special thanks for Ky btw for some part of this story) Quickly Jake threw Kari's blade away from him with the flick of his finger as he slowly smiled down at her. Kari stumbled backwards letting out another suprised exclaimation. Toadess saw this and slowly looked at Jake frightened. "Your not human..." She said softly angrily. "but you no god either.. your just a monster.. a sick monster.. a power hungry disguisting MONSTER!" She yelled at Jake angrily before summoning forth her own levitating golden blade in front of her. The blade shone against the afternoon warm sun ((yes its afternoon now)) She then quickly threw her pointed finger twoards Jake's direction with a loud battle cry. The blade ripped through the air aiming straight twoards Jake's body. Jake Calmly turned twoards the blade and stood absoutly still not moving his arms up at all. The blade then Slammed into some solid object just in front of Jake's face that let out a subtle blue glow before dissepearing. Jake let out a small chuckle before the blade fell twoards the ground. "Stop it Toadess darlin.. Your just too funny." He then held back his head and let a louder laugh. Toadess's eyes filled with rage before she then pointed her finger into the air again summoning out more golden dappled weapons. Axes, Swords, daggers, and arrows filled the sky above Toadess. Mint looked up at the weapons with awe. Toadess's hand shook as if she was holding them all up in the air. For a brief second she took a deep breath and then quickly threw her hand forward. "HAA!!!!" She yelled out and all the weapons flew twoards Jake like a massive tidal wave. Jake stood still closing his eyes and had a confident smile all over his face. The weapons smashed all about him. The weapons hit the same strange blue light around him, and then fell twoards the ground letting out a heavy metal clunk. After they all fell twoards the ground Jake opened his eyes and stared straight at Toadess with a smile. "hehe.. Entertaining..." He smirked and then threw back his arms letting out a mighty inhumane roar. The blue circular barrier revealed its true form around him and then slowly expanded around him. Kari saw what was about to happen and quickly turned to Toadess Mint and Riku. "everyone! please get down!" She yelled out as she rose her sword up in front of her face and placing herself in front of The 3. Riku didnt move but instead rushed to his mothers side. "Let me fight with you Mother!" He yelled out slowly holding his arm cannon up in front of his face imitating his mother. "I can fight off the blast too!" Kari looked down at her son with a touched expression but quickly made the serious mother face that only a son would know. "Sorry... but.. i can't let you..." she then lifted her other hand and gave a simple wave motion. This summoned a gust of wind twoards Riku and brushed him back into Toadess's arms. There Toadess grasped onto Riku and Mint tightly before retreating behind a tree. Riku quickly tried to fight out of Toadess's grip. "NO!! LET ME GO!" He yelled out. Jake's blue barrier then begun to throb in size and give off a violent electicity around it. the electricity struck various objects around him and ripped up the ground around. One bolt of lightning quickly leaped twoards Kari's sword striking it and causing her body to stumble back slightly. Kari quickly ragained her ground as her sword glowed a subtle blue from the electicity. Toadess Quickly held Riku down against the tree and then touched the tree comanding it to cover the 3 with its powerful roots. Quickly the tree grew roots out of the ground and cover up the 3. "Foolish Riku.. you no not what destruction your about to see..." She looked straight at The young rayan with some anger in her eyes. Mint remained quiet as she slowly peeked from the roots. "Is this the move my father fear so much? and studied so much to evade?" She slowly whispered to herself. Quickly Jake's eyes flashed and his entire body shook from the strong electricty. He then let out an insane smile. His eyes was no more of a humans but a frightning glowing white. He then slowly moved his arms up and then produced a strange electric blade in front of him. He grasped the blade slowly and all the electricity around him flew into a stream twoards the false sword. Digging deep within him, Jake pulled from some unknown source just enough strength to catapult himself into the air. At the height of his jump, Jake raised his sword with a cry. Bright lightning laced down and connected with his crackling sword, which channeled the energy. A constant stream of lightning suspended Jake in the air. The electricity danced and swirld around him. Up there he seemed to have sucked the energy from an unknown source, as if draining the skies iteself. Using His Blade, Jake concentrated the lightning into a single, giant, stream of blue swirling electricity that pierced the clouds. "INDIGNATION!!!" He yelled out with his voice echoing througout the field. With a flash, he tossed his small false sword Down at Kari Trailed with another giant, blue, sword, made entirely out of lightning. With a heave that split the sky. The ground about Kari split also before the Blade even hit the ground and the whole frields kicked up rocks from various places. The giant Electric blade stabbed downward into the soft grassy ground. Finally, no longer able to pierce any further into the earth, the blade compressed into a white hot dome. It remained like that for just a split second. Then beams of white light shot out of it and the dome erupted in a blinding flash. Jake Crossed his arms and smiled down at The destruction he had just produced as his body slowly fell twoards the ground "Feel the power of the perfected Indignation...." he whispered softly. ((not completed.))

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Posted: Tue Feb 22, 2005 8:18 pm


	((tch, giving my uber-cool move to an evil guy. xp j/k j/k))

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