Poem for a girl that will have a place in my heart

[Whiteknight01]

Give me your real opinion on this and be brutal its jsut a free verse poem i wrote

As time passes our body will fade
but not our spirits
Your will always have a place in my heart no matter what.
We are kindred spirits that will be separated by fate
But for the passes week we build a connection that cant be broken.

We love the same things t.v. shows, manga and music
In life we act the same - we hide our feelings from everyone
We hide in our room and find ways to express our feelings.

I did the most idiotic thing when I made that promise
To keep us separated for the rest of our days.

I will always think of you, everyday as the days go by
I will think of you whenever I listen to music, watch tv,
But i will remember you most when I watch Alice in Wonderland.

I will always love you no matter what
but I'm a man of my word
and I have to keep this promise - or go away against my moral
I'm sorry but i cant do that.

Alice, I will always think of you  

[thevampire58]

I actually thought that was pretty good, also you have a few minor misspellings.  

[ReichenFeels]

it was okay, but honestly, it could use a little work :3
i dont mean that in a bad way, its cute, it is, but im just giving critisim  

[Harley91594]

i love it. you are speaking from the heart. a poem doesn't need to rhyme. keep working, you'll be great.  

[xLiliths Childx]

I like it alot....It kinda reminds me of someone I absolutley adore....