grade my poem im only ps im 6th grade so judge it hard plz

[Warning M o d s]

What is life is it freedom punishment a gift friend ship but it all comes down to what is life how we git hear why are we here what is our future where was our begining where is our end it always comes to what is life no matter i have my opintion and you have youre of life  

[Warning M o d s]

come people come plz  

[Coco Kitty the Killer X]

not bad, I would say it's quite nice, but not so catchy... needs to be organized too, but other than that, nice start ^_^  

[Gooieduck1224]

dude, u need to structure that, i really didnt get most of that, because it wasnt structured. talk2hand  

[cuteDeath_Rose]

i like it dude mrgreen
its cute & u r too ^_^  

[cuteDeath_Rose]

(_/)
(o.o)
(><)o
u u
BUNNY!!!
whee
xd  

[Galiel Kaicho]

oh boy...You are so lucky, I made straight 100 in English! there are spelling errors, and grammar erros as well. The poem should be written in a way that people can read it and understand what you are trying to say!!  

[SexuallyActiveVirgin]

It is a relatively good poem. But, it should be written in a poem format. Which means, commas and the enter key are your friend.
I, myself am only in the 8th grade. Though, people say my poems are quite wonderful.
Some people have gifts for things such as poetry and others do not.
So, the poem was nice. But the grammar and format could be improved.

 

[MaySchoony]

It was good for a start. But i agree with everyone eles.
Remember:
The
Enter
Key
Is
Your
Friend
!
!
!

Good Luck! XD  

[Kiba Kyuubi]

Almost seems like a song nicely done 3nodding  

[axl the azn boi]

sorry it migt have been good
if u properly lined the stanzas and lines up right so taht the poem could have a ryme skeme(or free cerse) or some easier meanign to it  

[Out Of My Waffles]

i think its nice and trust mme i am a bvery hard critic its actualy my type of poems so yeah.....  

[somigirl777]

A few words of advice put them in stanzas, use transitions, have some sort of style to it and remember always check you spelling, phasing and well all your other grammer.  

[Sieffre]

One glaring mistake with the actual writing:

Quote:

What is life is it freedom punishment a gift friend ship but it all comes down to what is life how we git hear why are we here what is our future where was our begining where is our end it always comes to what is life no matter i have my opintion and you have youre of life

I'm assuming that that's all a question, so...
The "but" there doesn't make a whole lot of sense, since you didn't make a statement to contradict. This 'sentence' would work fine without the "but."

As for spelling, I've highlighted misspelled words in red. You should have run this through a spellchecker. Spellcheckers are practically everywhere, so there's no excuse for not using them.

Quote:

What is life is it freedom punishment a gift friend ship but it all comes down to what is life how we get here why are we here what is our future where was our beginning where is our end it always comes to what is life no matter I have my opinion and you have yours (?) of life

The structure is horrible. The entire "poem" is just one run-on sentence with no sense of proper punctuation. You need to learn how to (a) use the ENTER key and (b) place commas within your work so that it flows more smoothly. It could probably use some question marks too.

And the writing itself? It's pretty vague, and doesn't really say anything that hasn't been said in hundreds of other poems.

Hope that helps.  

[i poke you with chainsaw]

pretty good for a 6th grader!