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Posted: Tue Sep 15, 2009 12:55 pm
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Posted: Wed Sep 16, 2009 5:37 pm
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Posted: Wed Sep 16, 2009 5:44 pm
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Posted: Wed Sep 16, 2009 6:40 pm
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Posted: Fri Sep 18, 2009 5:29 pm
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Posted: Fri Sep 18, 2009 5:32 pm
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Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 7:26 pm
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Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 8:06 pm
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Posted: Mon Sep 21, 2009 7:15 pm
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Posted: Tue Sep 22, 2009 7:18 am
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Posted: Tue Sep 22, 2009 8:42 pm
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Posted: Wed Sep 23, 2009 3:30 pm
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Posted: Wed Sep 23, 2009 4:15 pm
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Posted: Wed Sep 23, 2009 5:07 pm
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One glaring mistake with the actual writing:
Quote: What is life is it freedom punishment a gift friend ship but it all comes down to what is life how we git hear why are we here what is our future where was our begining where is our end it always comes to what is life no matter i have my opintion and you have youre of life
I'm assuming that that's all a question, so... The "but" there doesn't make a whole lot of sense, since you didn't make a statement to contradict. This 'sentence' would work fine without the "but."
As for spelling, I've highlighted misspelled words in red. You should have run this through a spellchecker. Spellcheckers are practically everywhere, so there's no excuse for not using them.
Quote: What is life is it freedom punishment a gift friend ship but it all comes down to what is life how we get here why are we here what is our future where was our beginning where is our end it always comes to what is life no matter I have my opinion and you have yours (?) of life
The structure is horrible. The entire "poem" is just one run-on sentence with no sense of proper punctuation. You need to learn how to (a) use the ENTER key and (b) place commas within your work so that it flows more smoothly. It could probably use some question marks too.
And the writing itself? It's pretty vague, and doesn't really say anything that hasn't been said in hundreds of other poems.
Hope that helps.
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Posted: Wed Sep 23, 2009 5:36 pm
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