i started wrighting a song.....

[Prince of cosplay]

but i cant think of what else to add to it i has a little bit of it

you and me

why did i come to love you
if your to far to reach
i just cant take it,
i just cant fake it

cus its you and me together
you and me forever
i wonder what it would be like if it was you and me

the image of you its stuck in my mind
the day i met you stell sits in my mind
science when did i fall for you
untill just now we were friends

why did i hate you
o why do i love you

cus its you and me together
you and me forever
i wonder what it would be like if it was you and me  

[Prince of cosplay]

hello any oppions would be welcome  

[Kasi Karra]

I think your off to a good start.


just a couple of minor spelling errors

the second line of the song would be "if you're too far to reach"
technically cus is spelt wrong
third stanza second line, still not stell
third stanza third line, I think you meant to say since and not science.

I'm just going to assume that this is a girl singing talking about a guy, then I can use he and she when refering to the song.

I think you could add to the song by explaining a little more about why they can't be together. It does say she hated him, but now she loves him, so are they on uneven terms or does he already have a girlfriend?
You're chorus is a little contradictory. The way I interpret it, it says that it is me and you together, this is what's happening, but I wonder what it would be like.  

[Prince of cosplay]

thanks that helped a little bit
any other oppions from other people