Dark Moon

[Kimillia]

Um.... How can i say this? i have been wanting to start one of these for some time but im not sure if ppl would like it so i will just give u the first chapter how does that sound and if its good leave a post to tell me or a comment on my profile!


Chapter 1

Every person has a story to tell. So listen carfully and listen to mine. My name is Suki Mizki and im just a normal 15 yr old girl. Right intill my mom came back to find me. My father was just as normal as me working at a pizza shop and paying the bills. But how could we have know that my mother was unhuman. but really this is just wried  

[Hell of a Reaper]

It's a good start, but you could have written a whole lot more. People don't know if this would become a good story.  

[Himemii]

I agree it's a good start but be more descriptive when telling a story.  

[--- Rice_Cupcake ---]

it isn't very captivating that i would want to finish the story.  

[Kimillia]

sorry about that but i was at school doin that and the teacher saw me......and well it didnt go good i will finish it soon  

[Elethiae]

It sounds pretty interrting, just be sure to use loads and loads of discriptive words, ppl mostly swoon over stuff like that, plus it gives a certain atmosphere to your story. Goodluck! Keep up the writing! mrgreen  

[xxx-Kitsune-Nattie-xxx]

i deffently like the begining. try to keep going with it for sure smile