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Posted: Tue Jan 26, 2010 12:55 am
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Posted: Wed Jan 27, 2010 1:15 pm
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Posted: Wed Jan 27, 2010 6:48 pm
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Kasi Karra I really really liked this song blaugh I can feel the emotion and the pain and almost the entire expierence behind the lyrics and that makes the song all the more better. I did have a few questions though. On the Second line of the song "You said that I was strong" Is this meant to mean, your friend is saying that they are strong or saying that you (someone else) is strong. If she is saying she's strong I would use quotation marks around what she said to show that. I love the last 4 lines of the song. A suggestion that I have that you don't have to take is that I would change the arrangement of the lines to be, fall into the dark, then leave you alone, then finally gone, then sad, black heart. Since all of your choruses ended with the sad black heart line it adds to the repetiton. First of all: Thank you! You're the first person to read any of my songs that's actually given me any feedback that's actually been helpful! ^L^
With the second line, well, that first whole verse it's "me" saying it to my friend, if that makes sense. All of my best songs seem to have at least one confusing line in them now that I think about it biggrin
And I get what you mean about the last bit. I'll definitely think about this and I'll let you know if I decide to change it ^L^ Thanks for commenting though, and for reading heart CBL
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Posted: Wed Jan 27, 2010 6:55 pm
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Posted: Wed Jan 27, 2010 10:49 pm
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Posted: Thu Jan 28, 2010 8:58 am
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