Love Today, Love Tomorrow

[ada9]

I'm in love with
Your smile
Your laughter
Your personality

I'm in love with the fact the you'll never let me go
Even a bit of air could pull us apart

I'm love with the fact that you know me
The real me
Knowing when i sad, upset ,glad or hype

But one thing is
Do i love you

I'm i really in love or is my mind playing games
Thinking if i should or i shouldn't

But one thing is i don't want to lose you


Love is very complicated, but for now i should just let love find me first
So i don't hurt you,or hurt myself

 

[clm640]

The idea and meaning of your poem is great. I love it, but you have a few grammar mistakes.
"I'm in love with the fact the you'll never let me go" it should be "I'm in love with the fact that you'll never let me go".

"I'm love with the fact that you know me" it should be "I'm in love with the fact that you know me".

"Knowing when i sad, upset ,glad or hype" it should be "Knowing when i'm sad, upset ,glad or hype".

"I'm i really in love or is my mind playing games" it should be "Am i really in love or is my mind playing games".

Also, one stanza doesn't make a whole lot of sense.

I'm in love with the fact the you'll never let me go
Even a bit of air could pull us apart

If he'll never let you go, how can a bit of air pull you apart?

I'm sorry if I'm sounding really picky but I want to help you be the best you can be.

 

[ada9]

Yea i get it i understand all your trying to do is help me...and thanks......  

[daddylatrell]

I like "Am I really in love or is my mind just playing games?" line!
Oh, is this inspired from that one song that Dayonna sang in chorus?
I thought it did, haha.

 

[ada9]

no if you thinnk you will know  

[Enchanted Seduction]

I'm with the first person to post, I really liked the idea of the poem, but being the grammar Nazi that I am, the grammar mistakes bothered me. They kind of took away from the poem making it harder to understand. Revised, it would be beautiful(:  

[rizz14]

I personall believe that love is a wonderful thing
but it is just a state of mind
love changes as well as time
thats the only reall thing that actually stays eternal