poem about love

[Psych01]

Sharons Poetry

I'm helping my Girlfriend get some of her poetry online, she always talked and dreamed about it. please read and lemme know what u think!! :>  

[Hey I am Jan]

Not bad. biggrin  

[Psych01]

heart xp heart  

[Senri -l- Shiki]

soft, for your word and rhymes have touched my heart  

[Gawky_Hades]

I have to honestly say . . . .

"GOOD JOB MY FRIEND! YOUR GIRLFRIEND HAS SOME TALENT!" :3

 

[Psych01]

heart heart rofl wahmbulance  

[Psych01]

i updated her poetry site with one more...

there goes the light in the hallway
:>

there goes the light in the hallway  

[The Willow Of Darkness]

Not bad, I particularly like "there goes the light in the hallway," but it seems to me that there could be room for improvement.

Unfortunately, I am not really that knowledgeable with regards to poetry, so I don't think I can give a good in-depth critique, but they did seem to be rather lacking flow(I used to know what it was properly called, but I've forgotten now).
 

[Psych01]

her fav poem already draws amazingly quck positive responses!! Thanks : smile xd rofl 4laugh  

[Spherical Squares]

They're pretty. I kind of cried while reading the first one.  

[Psych01]

smile biggrin xd  

[God of Horribleness]

good nice like it  

[SweetSpiritSprite12]

Oh my gosh..her poems are so true and deep. She really got 2 me and I'm happy 2 say tht she is lucky 2 have such a kind & loving boyfriend. smile cry TEARS OF JOY.

The first one was so true and sad...I kinda felt my heart ache and my tears ready 2 fill up.. -_-. sad . cry .Its so beautiful and the rythm is just right. mrgreen . xp .

"THERE GOES THE LIGHT IN THE HALLWAY" is so desperately,agonizingly painful. =(. I kno how it feels 2 have such a cruel father and this am also saying for the Untitled onw bout her Dad. *_*. ninja cheese_whine sad surprised .

Lastly,I wud like 2 say,tht ur girlfriend has true talent and an understanding heart. heart xd 3nodding . I hope she continues 2 improve her poetry and may ur relationship stay stable & well.

-CLAPS- Bravo! I hope I can generate some poetry like tht sumday but for now,I can only hope,dream,and KEEP ON BELIEVING. xd 3nodding =D.

Sincerely Yours, SweetSpiritSprite12 heart xd mrgreen cheese_whine