This is a poem I wrote and I know it's sad but I would love feed back as I am submitting it to a contest.
Alone.
One word with so much meaning.
But I'm alone in this crowd.
All I see is you.
Standing in the middle.
with admirers all around
Your face glows in its perfection.
The green orbs that are the shade of perfect grass
I think you look my way
You flash a smile
I grin thinking its for me.
Then BAM!
I'm pushed out of the way
As your blonde hairs beauty takes her rightful place next to you
You never glance back my way
I look down and frown
I sigh and turn
Turn into the arms of someone twice has handsome
But again I'm pushed out of the way
For his perfect mate
I give up.
I walk away
The croup miles away.
I never look back and no one ever comes looking
I look down.
Wow, that's beautiful
I comment one last time
I bend my knees slightly
Flinging my self to the dark abyss below
As I fall I look up to see the same crowd
gathered over the cliff tears in there eyes.
Too late
That's what they are
Now my world has gone black
And My last breath stolen from me..
Please. Feed back
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