The Chinese Song Crusade ~*UPDATED*~

[Nyanfood]

等待
BY：RIYOKU SAKIMORI

心中的回音像飞鹅的翅膀，
像海鸟，飞往大海的波浪。
泪水的歌声是云后的阳光，
和等待雨停的太阳一样。

我站在泪水的歌声中，
等待这雨后的彩虹。
我的海鸟要飞多长
才能达到大海之旁？

你的温柔是美丽地彩虹，
挂在个蓝色地天空中。
夜空的月亮是你的笑容，
像彩虹下温暖地春风。

无数的年，无数的天，
你记不记得我的脸？
我会站在风雨之中，
等待你的彩虹和笑容。  

[[J.C.]]

sorry, i can't read this, i'll post again later when my mom tells me what it means blaugh  

[Nyanfood]

okay, thankies...  

[[J.C.]]

my mom came home and she read it to me
she said that it was, meh, and that there were a couple of errors in there
(ex. there's somewhere in there where the word ground or something like that isn't suppose to be there (i'm not sure, i think that's what she said))

but i liked how it rhymed 3nodding , i don't like free-verse poems blaugh  

[cold_blooded_chick]

Wow, did you write this? Totally cool! I'm not good with metaphors and imagery in poetry, unless it's dark and depressing...  

[Nyanfood]

I'm only thirteen, this isn't my best work anyway...but it's better than mom's even if it's probaly full of mistakes.  

[cold_blooded_chick]

Riyoku Sakimori

I'm only thirteen, this isn't my best work anyway...but it's better than mom's even if it's probaly full of mistakes.

I can't write anyhting like it, and I can't make chinese rhyme, just never worked for me.  

[shinelover]

hey this is pretty good! when u read it in chinese some of it doesn't really make sense..but then i went to www.dictionary.com and translated it straight into english and it made sense....did u originally write it in chinese??? or translated it from english..or at least some stuff from english......

it is like u made a direct translation from english so it doesn't realli make sense in chinese...but it's already realli good.  

[shinelover]

when my oldest sister read it she thought it was lyrics...mayb u can turn it into a song??  

[cold_blooded_chick]

shinelover

when my oldest sister read it she thought it was lyrics...mayb u can turn it into a song??

Indeed! 3nodding  

[[J.C.]]

making it a song would be kinda cool wink ...i think ........... (i'm just gonna leave it at there)  

[shinelover]

cold_blooded_chick

shinelover

when my oldest sister read it she thought it was lyrics...mayb u can turn it into a song??

Indeed! 3nodding

lol yeh i thought it was kinda like a song too!!!! but i couldn't read a lot of it coz it's in simp. chinese....i should practise simp. more  

[Nyanfood]

Good idea, I just got this great music that might go with it perfectly...and its floating around in my head...  

[shinelover]

Riyoku Sakimori

Good idea, I just got this great music that might go with it perfectly...and its floating around in my head...

nice...can i listen to it when u finish???? lol mayb u can get someone to sing it along to the music or u can sing then! then put it on the net so we can all listen!!!!! heart Good luck with the music!!!!!  

[Nyanfood]

Okay, I've got the song format here:

等待
BY：RIYOKU SAKIMORI

心中的回音象飞鹅的翅膀，
象海鸟，飞往大海的波浪。
泪水的歌声是云后面的阳光，
和等待雨停的太阳一样。

我站在泪水的歌声中，
等待这雨后的彩虹。
我的海鸟要飞多长
才能达到大海之旁？

等待你，回到我 的身边。
等待你的爱，等见到你的脸。
等待你，请不要随风去，
我会永远在这里，等待你。。。

你的温柔是美丽地彩虹，
挂在个蓝色地天空中。
夜空的月亮是你的笑容，
像彩虹下温暖地春风。

无数的年，无数的天，
你记不记得我的脸？
我会站在风雨之中，
等待你的彩虹和笑容。

等待你，回到我 的身边。
等待你的爱，等见到你的脸。
等待你，请不要随风去，
我会永远在这里。。。

应为我会很想你。。。
请不要忘记。。。