Beautiful Angel

[Allleex]

So here is a very small part of my 85 page story that I've been working on for years. It's going to be male/male, but there is none of that in this part.

http://heartlessnobody.livejournal.com/1117.html#cutid1  

[Spastic waffles]

Wow.

That's a great start. I can't wait to read more!

And if you ever get it published into an acutal book, let me know. I'll buy it. ^^  

[Allleex]

Spastic waffles

Wow.

That's a great start. I can't wait to read more!

And if you ever get it published into an acutal book, let me know. I'll buy it. ^^

Thank you! ^_^

I really wish I could get something published. I'm sure they'd expect to see something finshed. None of my stuff is finished yet. I really have to work on that.

I'm glad you liked it.  

[Oukow]

heart I loof if! And I loof it even more because I loof Yaoi! heart

One Word.

Genius!  

[Kattie]

I hope to read more, it seems really good. 3nodding  

[Tak-Jak]

so sweet
as a sleeping angel.

loverly.

heart -Remy

 

[Allleex]

Thank you all. I'm glad you liked it. ^_^  

[Xahmen]

The throw in of Alex's thought into the section where he seemed to be a 3rd person narrative on Roland's part threw me off, I would suggest either removing it all together, or simply shifting it to a section where Alex is the main narrator.

I liked it though.  

[Allleex]

Zahmen

The throw in of Alex's thought into the section where he seemed to be a 3rd person narrative on Roland's part threw me off, I would suggest either removing it all together, or simply shifting it to a section where Alex is the main narrator.

I liked it though.

Thanks for the suggestion. Once I get the story all written out I'm going to go back and re-write everything. I'll work on it later.

Thanks again. ^_^