Climbing the Hill

[Oukow]

I was almost there, almost at the very top, but something told me I was just dreaming. A voice in my head said to me in a whisper, that's not the end of it, there's much more to come.

"Indeed....Are you lying to me?" I said under my breath.

I could feel my bag bang against my leg, even though it was as light as a feather, since I had ate all the food inside, it still felt heavy, like a million bulldozers were strapped all around me. No, it was not the bag, it was the fact. The fact that if there was more to climb, I would die of hunger and most likely, insanity.

Why was I doing this? I had nothing to prove. At least, I didn't have anyone to prove it to.

I focused my attention back to the hill; the sun's rays were creeping over it.

"So close! SO CLOSE!" I laughed until I started coughing and had tripped.

I rolled and rolled and rolled.

I finally hit the bottom and slowly got up, almost falling back down. My body had scratches all over it, and dirt too was all over me.

I looked back up at the hill, and I laughed and laughed.

It could take a normal person to climb it an hour, but for me, no. I needed a wheelchair, but I had no money, I had only one thing. A desire to walk up that hill, on my own to feet.

But it was useless, I sat on the floor, realizing that I would have to crawl back home...  

[KirbyVictorious]

Niiice.

Haha, ANOTHER skitzo? O.o  

[Oukow]

I was really bored, so I just started writing this for no reason. xp  

[BlackHawkGS]

Haha. Interesting? I actually thought it was somewhat cool. A tale of taking on a challenge, and getting beat down in the end. Except you gave up... some heroic character YOU are.

Just kidding. I like your work!  

[KirbyVictorious]

xd  

[Oukow]

xd biggrin xd  

[Tak-Jak]

haha. Very fun.
Only suggestion.

Is to skip a line between paragraphs.
Since we are unable to indent.
It helps with the reading of it
so you dont get confused.

But I liked this.

 

[Oukow]

Tak-Jak

haha. Very fun.
Only suggestion.

Is to skip a line between paragraphs.
Since we are unable to indent.
It helps with the reading of it
so you dont get confused.

But I liked this.

they should make for we can indent. gonk

Yesh, I shall do so.  

[Tak-Jak]

Oo. That reads much cleaner.
Glad I could help.

And yes.. indenting would make Gaia
much easier for writers.

 

[Oukow]

Glad that you did help! 3nodding  

[Spastic waffles]

Nice.

I think it could've also made a nice "accomplish your dreams" corny story, but I like it like this, too.

Original. Most people wouldn't have made the character fail.  

[Oukow]

Spastic waffles

Nice.

I think it could've also made a nice "accomplish your dreams" corny story, but I like it like this, too.

Original. Most people wouldn't have made the character fail.

I kinda get tired with the accomploshing stuff sometimes 3nodding  

[Rosealean]

I liked this, especially when the character started laughing hysterically, it really had an impact. I felt that the person was defeated and in a way feeling it pretty heavily, because when a person is in shock or is handling a lot of emotions, people would normally laugh before any other emotion shows. Besides, it sounds like something that would happen to me that I would laugh about...^_^  

[Oukow]

Rosealean

I liked this, especially when the character started laughing hysterically, it really had an impact. I felt that the person was defeated and in a way feeling it pretty heavily, because when a person is in shock or is handling a lot of emotions, people would normally laugh before any other emotion shows. Besides, it sounds like something that would happen to me that I would laugh about...^_^

Thank you

blaugh  

[KirbyVictorious]

Oukow

Spastic waffles

Nice.

I think it could've also made a nice "accomplish your dreams" corny story, but I like it like this, too.

Original. Most people wouldn't have made the character fail.

I kinda get tired with the accomploshing stuff sometimes 3nodding

I would've. For some reason, unrequited dreams, love, and accomplishments intrigue me. When I write them, that is. heart