Wrote a song...

[Ky-Kaisuke]

Want to know if anyone likes it.

It was just the other day...
I made a great mistake...
But it would take me months to realize.
I was letting go...
Of the one thing that was hanging on...

I know you thought it was me
I made you so happy
But look at me now
Im reduced to nothing
Without you anymore

Remember all the days we spent
Dreaming about life
Together as husband and wife
I suppose they don't mean a thing now
And don't you worry girl
I know you'll find someone better than me
Its not hard...

I know you thought it was me
I made you so happy
But look at me now
Im reduced to nothing
Without you anymore

And if I had to choose
Between life or you
I'd be lying at your feet
My last breathes for your forgiveness
I'll hope you don't hate me
And maybe
We'll be just fine...

I know you thought it was me!
I made you so damn happy!
But look at me now!
I've been reduced to nothing!
Without you...

 

[[+.Rubber.Ducky.+]]

Its good.
I like it.
=]
<3

 

[Thida Fxcking Tragedy++]

Ky-Kaisuke

Want to know if anyone likes it.

It was just the other day...
I made a great mistake...
But it would take me months to realize.
I was letting go...
Of the one thing that was hanging on...

I know you thought it was me
I made you so happy
But look at me now
Im reduced to nothing
Without you anymore

Remember all the days we spent
Dreaming about life
Together as husband and wife
I suppose they don't mean a thing now
And don't you worry girl
I know you'll find someone better than me
Its not hard...

I know you thought it was me
I made you so happy
But look at me now
Im reduced to nothing
Without you anymore

And if I had to choose
Between life or you
I'd be lying at your feet
My last breathes for your forgiveness
I'll hope you don't hate me
And maybe
We'll be just fine...

I know you thought it was me!
I made you so damn happy!
But look at me now!
I've been reduced to nothing!
Without you...

Hmm.. it's a good song. but it needs a little bit more work. like the part that goes
"I know you thought it was me
I made you so happy
But look at me now
Im reduced to nothing
Without you anymore"

because i don't rly get the top 2 lines of that part. it's quite confusing.
and if that's the chorus of the song then i would suggest to make it a lil bit longer or repeat it

and maybe try to add extra stuff here and there to make the point you want outmore clear.

Listen or not. it's your song.not mine.

 

[emo girl_21]

The lyrics are good but i had a har time trying to find a good tune to go with it lol.  

[-Isel-]

I could put that to music, actually. I like it, but it doesn't sound like something I'd particularly be interested in. Ain't my style.  

[tear drop angel]

i like it lots wish i could write like that  

[apprentice_9]

I actually liked it...i thought it sounded good. Good job. 3nodding heart  

[TorioAGoGo]

i heart it  

[Ky-Kaisuke]

Thankies for all the input.
3nodding

 

[xkill.rock.n.rollx]

i like the lyrics  

[Amazingemail]

Didn't Silverstein write that?  

[Ky-Kaisuke]

I don't think so.
But if they did then me and them think exactly alike.

 

[Rellik San]

Ky-Kaisuke

I don't think so.
But if they did then me and them think exactly alike.

Which isn't something to be proud of.  

[Ms._Fashion_Victim_2006]

::gasp:: jealousy pulses through veins.....
I LOVED IT!!!!! (I would love it even better if I could hear it w/ a tune or instruments or somethin'  

[Amazingemail]

Rellik San

Ky-Kaisuke

I don't think so.
But if they did then me and them think exactly alike.

Which isn't something to be proud of.

I dunno, I'd be proud of being a whiny, melodramatic teen in my late 20's.