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This, my friends and fellow guildmates, is the heroine of this comic I'm in the process of making at the moment. Her name is Gloria, and is the sister of the main character, whom I will post later.

After a long whiles of being the wholesome critic on a lot of people's works, I now post something of my own creation! Go ahead, tear at it however you like!

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REMOVED FOR BEING INAPPROPRIATE AND IN NEED OF REPLACEMENT.

More sketchiness to come!

[F4] if possible.

I'll be posting more as I belch 'em out...
Hmmm... maybe I should open up an art portfolio pretty soon for the forums... o.0

I like it.

I think her head looks a little lumpy though.

Way Nice! I can't wait to see more from you.

Hey! This is a definite improvement over that grayscale girl you did a while back...however..I do spot some proportional problems with this character as well.

I'm guessing it's your comic style...but you have an undying habit of making the shoulders too narrow and compressed xD. She's a human being-not a piece of metal in a compressor. The space between her neck and her shoulders is angled down at an impossible angle, which is the culprit for the super-compressed look. Now, I would understand this if her arms where tightly crossed over her body (you know..the cute girl thing where girls extend there arms downward over the body...squish their shoulders together...cup their hands and smile?), but it seems like her arms are hanging as normal.

What's with the crazy elbow? xD The base of her forearm is very wide..and yet the elbow suddenly takes a deep slide into "narrowdom". That is actually the first thing I noticed with your drawing...as well as her paper-thin wrist.

The hand? Excellent. It's so natural and the knuckles are VERY well placed. The collarbones are where they should be and shaded appropriately..the SHAPE of the shoulders ( as in..where the muscles would be underneath the skin) is very well done. However, the neck looks like someone squeezed a bit to hard for human liking.

I >Love< her expression. You are obviously a master at anime eyes, and express such skill in the upper eyelash and reflection of the iris. The lips are absolutely gorgeous...special detail noted with the lip creases ^^.

The eyebrows, however, are not so much to be desired. Quick obtuse, lopsided triangles don't complement her beautiful eyes...however..her amazing hair DOES. ( Save the lump atop her head..though I'm guessing those are bangs?)


Of course the wrinkles on the clothing are great and the shading is also very well done.

You are a talented artist! I could definitely see you being a comic artist o.o! Post more, will ya?

I figured it was just her hair, from the way she was facing..so I didn't go into detail about it..just a wondering statement xD.




GrAH! I ment to say "wrist". I am SO sorry ><. I should have went back to edit. Damned typos.




BWUAH HA! I knew it! Your style makes it evident because of the way you shade, your use of implied motion, and character design. With your skill you are sure to be succesful!


I wish you the best of luck! And am awaiting to critique the next piece. Hopefully, when I go about the redo of my gallery...you'll come by. You seem to have a better knowledge of art than most of those here on Gaia. Most people are really just too nice when critiquing. THE ART WORLD ISN'T NICE! ><. It's more likely to kill you xD.

Right then, on your newest art...I believe it is a backstep from what you have recently posted. Here's why:

The first thing about this picture that hit me was his hair. The spikes look so sloppy and quickly shaded that it really takes heavily away from the two smooth flowing locks that come down around his face. His nose is huge! It could be part of the character design, but I'm not sure if it should take up half of his face ( If you measure, that nose takes up the entire cheek area on the right side of his face (( viewer's left)) ). The lips are completely off-kilter, making it appear as if his mouth is slowly sliding to the right ( viewer's left), and brings greater emphasis to the largeness of his nose.

What's up with his eyebrows? ><. They're incredibly thick obtuse triangles slapped down and shaped into an elongated point. They are also slightly crooked, and brings to light the fact that this character's eyes are too big for his narrow face.


Onto the body. His anatomy is very off. Though his clothing seems to be tight, his muscles aren't set as a base for where the clothing should go. In fact..everything is sliding to the right ( viewer's left). This complicates the fact that even though it seems you've made some rough attempts at sketching and shading a chest, the implied motion makes it seem as if everything is tilting to the right ( viewer's left), even though he is clearly standing straight by the position of his arms. His left hip ( Viewer's right) is placed significantly higher than the other. You did make a rough indication of where his abs should be, yet..you develop nothing else on his torso.

REMEMBER. When you are drawing something form-fitting...PERFECT THE FORM FIRST. Let the clothes fall around the characters body. Build the wrinkles around THAT. Do not assume the places where the winkles would go without knowing where is BODY IS FIRST.


I'm not sure I understand the strange v-neck apparatus coming down across his shoulder blades. Is it a necklace? A part of another shirt? Your shading does not specify. Also, what is the thing below it- a coiling shirt collar? Make your shading more specific, as it is nearly impossible to decipher what he is wearing above the chain that links his two shoulder pads together.


The shoulder pads themselves, although basic, are a nice addition to the character BECAUSE they are basic. The chain is a nice addition and well done in the shape of each individual link.

I see that you did indicate the position of his muscles in his right arm ( V.L.), but when duplicating it in the left arm ( V.R.) the composition becomes clumsy. It looks as if he is wearing some kind of pad under his gloves....I honestly think you were rushing with that particular part.


btw...his neck is way too long and it looks like his Adam's apple has become a cracked egg drooping down his skin.

Honestly, you should have spent a little more time on this. The first post far outshines what this sketch of Draco Honoris shows. Hone your form! Emphasize your lines to better demonstrate the movement of the clothing wrinkles! Concentrate on the features of the face...but most of all...consider your all over proportion and do not develop something more than another. It will make your artwork look unbalanced!

Why'd ja post it then?

I suspect you're sketching a re-do! Hopefully you'll replace the current sketch soon ><. It really does no justice to the level of skill in the previous picture.

Ahhh I see I see.

We're having midterms here ><. Damned tests...At least we get half the day off for -em.


Btw, you're studying Law, right? That's great. It'll add heavily to your comics by way of deeper plot..since law brings out the ruthelessnes logic and shrewdness in us. xD. You'll have an edge on drama, that's for sure.