Hey,im new to this guild and this is my first poem.

[xBeautifulxDisgracex]

Another day goes by
Another day with out you
I thought you were at my side
I thought you were close
But now that i see
That you were never there  

[the Great Gnu]

I don't mean to flame but, it's too short, and too cliche'.

If you're gonna use the "I'm alone" thing, then use it in a way that portrays sadness. I don't mean that you have to be depressed about it, but your poem sounds... empty.

Another day goes by
and it still feels like my heart stops beating
Another day without you
sometimes I wonder, did you care?

stuff like that. I know mine is kinda even more cliche, but it shows emotion.  

[xBeautifulxDisgracex]

i know thanks for the comment and for the advise.i know i can do better then this i was having an off day.when i mean off i mean i wanted to die.  

[the Great Gnu]

Hatoko~Kobayashi

i know thanks for the comment and for the advise.i know i can do better then this i was having an off day.when i mean off i mean i wanted to die.

yeah, I have those days too.  

[xBeautifulxDisgracex]

i got all Fs in all my classes... thats why i wanted to die.... and becuz of that i didnt eat for 2 days...then i passed out in class...at least i missed some of my classes..